really good. Still some mistakes, you should probably have someone else read it before you post, people tend to miss their own mistakes. Besides that though i like. Please update soon.

That was really good! Poor Adrienne. Write more soon.

u have to update soon

must get rid of heather

WRITE MORE! *holds wet noodle up threatenly* WRITE MORE!

Aww that was a sweet chapter, he tought her how to swim! Did Jillie just not notice her friend wrapped around her brother? How old was Jonnhy here? I know, so many questions, please don't get overwhelmed, lol

Good update. I liked how Jillie and Johnny were sarcastic when they were fighting. That was funny. Write more!

wow! this is really good! you really made your reader be captured into the story... I didn't even notice the grammer mistakes and stuff

interesting. enjoyable.

I liked the background on Adrienne's and Jillie's friendship. Good chapter, write more soon.

Great starting chapter, it was really good. I can't wait to see more, update soon!

Hehehe.. it's a cute story lol! Continue PLZ!

This is good so far. Write more. Make sure you check your spelling and stuff though. Otherwise, great! Keep writing.

M, good!

I really like this, and think it could be very well developed.

Bit of CC, though:

Watch your punctuation, you seem to be missing a lot of it.

It isn't really interfering with my understanding the story, but it could get that way if not checked out.

Anyway, love the story, update soon!

Wow - I really love this! Please, with cherries on top update soon! I like it alot!