|Reviews for paper hearts|
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/6
That was so beautiful... i read it about 10 times and each time i could feel the pain. Well done
| Peachy-09 chapter 1 . 9/13/2012
| hotleafjuice chapter 1 . 7/15/2012
All I can say is: it's truly beautiful
| FreekyDisaster18 chapter 1 . 7/12/2012
Hey! I am here to share some exciting news! This poem was added to the miscellaneous category over on A Drop of Romeo! :)
Here's the Review:
"In “Paper Hearts”, Citrus Scented has shown the power of how little is more. This poem consists of three short stanza's and yet each one; even the sentences themselves; are dripping with the raw emotion of someone having their heart broken. Many techniques are used throughout this poem to make it visually stunning; as well as literary pleasing. Citrus Scented centred the entire text, used little love hearts to divide the stanzas but the bravest move was the lack of both capital letters and punctuation. This; in my opinion; just adds to the raw emotion, making it feel as if the character is genuinely that heartbroken they do not have time to sit and worry about a full stop after their sentences because it is a whirlwind of emotion, a wave that just needs to be set free! Add to this the beautiful imagery spun by Citrus Scented's words that allows the reader to imagine each moment, you have a poem that is a delight; despite it's topic; to read."
| Zander Star chapter 1 . 2/23/2011
Oh, this was bloody brilliant! Truly excellent, I mean it!
| brittle hearts chapter 1 . 4/9/2010
That was lovely.
| morphine and lollipops chapter 1 . 3/12/2010
| Artume chapter 1 . 2/10/2010
I really like how you wove in the 'paper hearts' bit. Also, not using capital letters...it just adds to the feeling of the poem. Very good! And congrats on the nomination, good luck!
| Damien Vlashtov chapter 1 . 2/9/2010
Interesting, I like the honest emotion behind this piece. The imagery of biting your wrists is particularly commonplace, original, and thus very effective at really communicating that "oh god I can never have you" emotion. You actually made me remember this emotion, which was awesome and really terrible at the same time...The one critique I would say, on the line "silly me like always i forgot-" I would add a comma- "silly me, like always i forgot". That makes the flow more powerful, in my opinion. It's unlikely that you'll change this piece now however, so regardless-well done. You've created a poignant bit of writing.
| hayleemarie chapter 1 . 1/2/2010
Simple and beautiful.
| RawrEllieMayMightBeADinosaur chapter 1 . 6/20/2009
This was almost childlike, in a way. Simple word choices, excellant stanzas.
I really liked the line,
"for your turquoise eyes
to paint me pretty."
Excellant. I'm actually inspired to write some poetry of my own now, great job, I don't get inspired very easily.
Hmm. The hyphen in the last stanza seemed out of place to me. I don't know. Maybe it was intentional. Keep up the good work.
-Love from the RM, link's on my page.
| kyox88 chapter 1 . 4/25/2009
my heart was only made of paper
and paper hearts
can't wait forever.
love this line the most!
| lumanarann chapter 1 . 9/3/2008
I like the imagery and, again, loved the last line.
| laxchica516 chapter 1 . 2/6/2008
I love how real this is. I especially love the word choice in the line "paint me pretty". Great poem!
| Love in the Roses chapter 1 . 1/23/2006
Very, very powerful. The end keeps it together- great choice of words.