|Reviews for Drumbeat Ribs|
| evm chapter 1 . 9/8/2005
i love all the different rythyms in this, it flows so naturally and it's very nice to read aloud. you create such powerful electric themes with your pieces, they're so energetic and ALIVE.
| Weeba chapter 1 . 6/6/2005
Wonderful. It simply pulsates with energy and life, just the way the drum does. my only suggestions would be: (actually, these are both rather large things, but since you asked...)
1. That you take a good look at the rhythm in certain places. I think that a poem about this topic should have a very steady and powerful rhythm to it, and this does in some places, but sometimes you lose it. Look over it and see what you can do.
2. That you do the same with the rhyme scheme. Again, you do very well with it for the most part, but sometimes you lose it.
Normally, I'd leave this alone, but since you asked and you seem willing to actually work at a poem, I thought I'd mention it.