Reviews for Swingset Savior
Transparent Cherub chapter 1 . 6/11/2005
thank you for the review, i really like this poem. all the description is really quite beautiful. i don't have any constructive critisicm (or know how to spell the word). nice writing.
myheartiswaypastbeating chapter 1 . 6/8/2005
Wow that one is soo much better than the other one I read, and that one was pretty good. I LOVE this poem. caliorbust
Jason chapter 1 . 6/8/2005
I love all these poems, Laura. This one is amazing.

I think you should put emphasis on the word "don't" in the line "chain's that don't hold me back".like "-don't-" to add a pause, like it's an unusual thing for chains to do...or simply italics or something. Just an idea.
hmmmmm chapter 1 . 6/6/2005
the second stanza is absolutely beautiful, and the title makes it stand out.
Weeba chapter 1 . 6/6/2005
Oh, glorious. The imagery is stunning, and I love love love the idea of striking up a conversation with the wind. Just the whole thing is fabulous. And I can identify with it completely. I love swinging; especially when there's no one else around, like on the school playground it's not nearly as much fun. Anyway, wonderful, wonderful job on this. Five stars.

Keep writing!