Reviews for When Time Sleeps
theysayshannon chapter 20 . 7/30/2006
First thing's first, I love the Prince. He is such a likeable character, and I've allready formed a crush on him. *grins*.

So does he have a crush on Princess Naomi? I'm so excited to see the relationship they form. And what is going on government-wise between the families.

And I love how he dreams of Roselle. That is so sweet.

"”-or when the speaker is unbelievably mad.”"

For some reason that made Quora sound very unformal. It's sort of common knowledge that full names are used in a burst of madness. I don't know, that made it sound awkward to me. Personal preference I guess?

I like the letter at the end. I enjoy so much how for some reason he is connected to Roselle even though he doesn't know her much. I mean, if I was to be married without so much as knowing someone, I wouldn't be going- I am longing to see you and miss you. You sound gorgeous. etc. etc. But I like how he is. It shows his character more, and I can't wait to see how he grows.

Overall, great job. Again. Nothing new. Keep up the great work. :)
lool chapter 20 . 7/28/2006
The Gobbler chapter 14 . 7/25/2006
Well, good job on this chapter, as always. I'm wondering how long it takes to graduate from Splenda School; Lucie's just in her first year, and already getting moved up to the most advanced classes she can take. Are they just the most difficult a first year can take, or the most difficult in the school? Hmm... I'm also curious as to whether we're gonna get any more background on Lucie's real family. Just wondering. I loved the dialogue between Lucie and Katarina; it's always awesome to see the main character shoot down someone annoying. Well done, again.
Silent Force chapter 20 . 7/21/2006
Sorry for the belated review! I really liked the two latest chapters. I especially enjoyed how you characterized Philip; it makes him seem a lot more human than he ever was in the Disney movie. And I think I like Naomi as well, but I'll have to see more of her first. Nice job with plot development, and I can't wait to see where you take this next!
The Gobbler chapter 13 . 7/18/2006
I liked how this chapter showed how the school changed Lucie, how she no longer fits in with the peasants. I also liked the part about her wanting to be a collector to see the insides of peoples' houses. I also liked the last line of the chapter, "I no longer felt at home in Trollemund." It had a sort of finality to it.
free-to-dream15 chapter 20 . 7/18/2006
oh wow! Very nice chapter indeed! I absolutely adore Phillip but of course it is hard not to...update SOON!
CerriC chapter 20 . 7/14/2006
I was a little confused about the politics, but I'm pretty sure that I was starting to figure them out. I like the way you're introducing this new place and the new POV character; it flows very well and doesn't seem like too much at once.

I'm really interested in this part of the story - I can't wait to read more!

(Oh, and thanks for the reviews! :) )
CerriC chapter 19 . 7/14/2006
"The courtyard of the palace was in cacophony." - cacophony is a noun, so 'in' should be 'a'

"matured into a impudent" - 'an' impudent

Honestly, I'm intrigued by the POV change and I don't think you could have picked a better character for it! The time change is, imo, necessary - learning about Roselle's childhood would have been really tedious, and I don't think it would have furthered the plot at all.
ZealousKnight chapter 20 . 7/13/2006
Another good chapter. Phillip promises to be amusing. I agree with softlycryingrain; he's very human, as she put it. Very down to earth and likeable.

I like how you've highlighted the Sorrelfenyi (did I spell that right?) customs. The bit with the names was a nice touch. Was that inspired by Russian naming conventions?
The Gobbler chapter 12 . 7/13/2006
Yay! I really like reading this. I liked Lucie's experience of the city, and I also like Adriel's grumpiness toward the school. Have you read Spindle's End, by Robin Mckinley? I just thought of it because it's another retelling of Sleeping Beauty. Ok, I'm rambling. Good chapter, I can't wait to see what happens when the princess comes into play.
The Gobbler chapter 11 . 7/12/2006
I liked the whole lesson bit, especially the specific reasons Madame Toribama talked about. I also liked the line about time being asleep, just thought it was clever. Poor Adriel...
The Light of Earendil chapter 20 . 7/12/2006
WONDERFUL chapter. I love Philip... and I think there's something going on between him and Naomi. I mean, how can he be expected to fall in love with Roselle if he's never met her? Well, whatever you decide to do, I'm sure it'll be amazing ) Keep being fantastic!
softlycryingrain chapter 20 . 7/12/2006
I like how you mention the particular customs of the country, it adds more of a realistic flavor to your world.

ha. I like how you characterize Prince Philip. He seems a lot more human/real here than in the other versions I've read/seen.

I also like the character of Naomi, and am curious about her future role in the plot.

I'm glad you put in the review response, it cleared some things up for me too!

Sorry for the lack of CC, great job, and I look forward to more!~SCR
softlycryingrain chapter 19 . 7/12/2006
It is not as bad as you might think! Though maybe not as outstanding as some of your previous chapters.

I like the beginning sentence, but I think you could do without the ... for some reasons it looks unprofessional to me.

No complaints about the rest of the chapter, as always I enjoyed it very much.

If you really don't like interrupting the chapter with pov and time change, you could always start a new chapter there, but this way is fine too. It really doesn't make a difference either way in my opinion.

And now I wonder who on earth this princess Naomi is! Yay for new characters and twists in the plot!

All in all, excellent job!~SCR
ADSpencer chapter 20 . 7/12/2006
HeeHee, "Insert foot in mouth" Philip, lol-everyone in the court should be wearing that tee shirt. Anyhow, great chapter. I loved it. Keep it up.
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