Reviews for When Time Sleeps |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Loved the beginning of this, I am definately reading the rest! Ps. I made an update on "The non-beauty and the kind beast if you want to check it out! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter, per usual. It could've done with more description about the obstacle course, but I liked it all the same. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This sounds like a really interesting story. There wasn't much suspense or anything in the prolouge to really grab the reader's attention, but that's all right. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Let me start off by saying don't worry, you did a good job in this chapter and are getting better at description. Next, this chapter was awesome! That course was hard! I mean, she doesn't even know any magic! I did like that Adriel blew a whole mountain...that made me laugh. Can't wait to see what happens next...hope you post more soon! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like the story quite a bit. Interesting characters. Lucie doesn;t exactly seem your typical damsel in distress. However, be warned tht u dont need to be tall and blonde to become a Mary Sue. She isn't anything like one yet, but I've seen good characters go bad. I like the banter between everyone, seems friendly. I dont kno y but solaris seems vaguely creepy to me. The story definately flows well, |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great story so far! You must update it soon! D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome chapter! D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Kinda a short chapter, but still good. You might want to try and use more description. |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a great story so far. But I still don't see what this has to do with Sleeping Beauty. Oh well- keep up the great writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter! You have more detail in this one, but a few spelling errors. Which is no big deal really. Good writing. D |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good chapter, a few spelling errors. I really liked it, but you might want ot try and add more description. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yes- I agree with the first couple of lines talking about princesses and princes. Great start so far! |
![]() ![]() ![]() This is a cute story! I like it! But I'm not seeing the connection between it and Sleepin Beauty... at least... the Sleeping Beauty I'm thinking of anyway (the Disney version). Oh well, guess I'll just have to wait and see! :Dbtw, I like Solaris! :P |
![]() ![]() ![]() makes sense... :) CD |
![]() ![]() ![]() I just thought of something... In a couple of chapters back, I think, you said that if the fairy magic and stuffs was hereditary...so they didn't need to take the test becasue they already knew. And Lucie went cuz she didn't know who her parents were so she could have never have known she was a fairy. But Adriel knows who her parents are... so uh... why was she in the waiting room waiting to take the test? I dunno, I was just wonderin.. Other then that, I think it's SPECTACULAR! lol... keep up the great work! |