Reviews for Hypocrisy
luv me like no other chapter 1 . 9/12/2007
this is so cute. ! :D
Vagabond Amanda chapter 1 . 8/27/2005
It's perfect...I don't think I could have said it better myself! Very rare insight. YAY!
Clodhopper chapter 1 . 8/23/2005
i thought the lines seperating it all were a little confusing and not needed. the poem itself was well done, strong, i liked it

ice flyer chapter 1 . 8/19/2005
i really really really like this poem, and i can't even put my finger on WHY..but it's excellent. i feel all..i dunno, but it's very profound. lol, great poem :)
Falsetto chapter 1 . 7/23/2005
Ha! That made me giggle. I find it kind of funny how in the first stanza from the description of the girl, she seems like the type of person to write about bunnies and butterflies. And then when you move to the second stanza, it's all those typical angsty topics of teenage poetry today.
godsandstars chapter 1 . 7/5/2005
hah. the end was kinda interesting. the poem flows well, and i suppose this can happen a lot. interesting format. keep up!
INTP chapter 1 . 7/2/2005
I love when self-deprecation is done well. You are obviously a good poet if you can write about a cliched poet without being one yourself. Because you're not; I find your work very insightful and original. The subjects that your cliched poet are hilarious; I think everyone must write about those,even I, but I think if you do it well and in a way that no one has done it before, then you are not so bad at all.
Lellida chapter 1 . 6/25/2005
I like the simplicity and cleanliness of the piece, especially because it portrays something different. This concept seems to be rampant and I'm surprised more poets haven't confronted it. You ended the poem perfectly, tying in your life with that of an obvious outsider who "isn't any good at poetry" I like it, especially the way the stanzas are divided. Pretty descriptions in the first one, the issue in the second, and a final knock-out idea in the end.
Liv Alyttle chapter 1 . 6/23/2005
This made me laugh. _ Nice, funny, poem.
Yasmina chapter 1 . 6/22/2005
It's funny. I like it if only for its humor... Of course I laugh at everything you say anyway...
Charna chapter 1 . 6/10/2005
This was a poem?

Ah well then...I didn't was more like discombobulated sentences divided up into lines.
Lord-of-Fools chapter 1 . 6/10/2005
Don't be so hard on yourself! It made me smile, too.
B Eskew chapter 1 . 6/10/2005
I like that. This is the first thing I've read on here today that has actually made me smile.

I would take out the horizontal bars and put ellipses in their place. They're just a little too distracting.

Good job.