So he's 21 and still in high school?

Interesting summery you put up here. It's the reason I clicked the link. Although, I'm sure that was your intention. Congratulations. You know how reverse psychology works.

As I was reading this, I'm like, "Kristy died. O.o" I had this really low sinking feeling in me. I wanna cry!

i dont care wat any1 else thinks bt iluve it...Awesum job...:)

XOXOXOXO,

Freak of Music

I loved this story. Please dont take it down. That would suck. I understand your readers / your problems with it. You obviously were young when it was written and your maturity level is clear when reading, but that is a problem i have found a lot on this particular site. However, I think you struck gold with your main characters. They are awesome. Honestly, I really hope that you will decide to rewrite this one day. It is clear by the epiloge that you are capable of a much more mature level of writing now. I think if you went back and rewrote it, it would be something you could really be proud of. you have a GREAT first draft here. Use this as an outline and fill in the blanks. There are things I personally woulc change (like fixing some time lines that dont match up, changing the names for Rae and Ray, and the occassional times when it has too much of the author's imput in the story) But I think even with these issues, it is still really good. Honestly, I read the story twice. I love the characters that much! Also, I love the way the story ended, please dont change that EVER. I would have been mad at you if Rae hadnt gotten her butt kicked and if L&R didnt end up together. Good Job! I am gonna go read your other stories now :)

Please write a sequel! Forget The haters!

Aw man I just typed this long review and in the middle of the sentence it all just vanished.

Huff.

Well I'll have to summarise it now:

1. I loved it

2. It was captivating and amazing, i loved your presentation of the characters

3. It definitely doesnt suck

4. Dont take it down

5. Only negative thing to say is that it was too short, i would have loved more :)

Overall, well done. Especially for something you did at 14.

It's god.

This is really my type of story. I do think it happened a little fast but it had a good plot. I would love to read a sequel, especially now that you have probably matured as an author and your characters have entered a new stage in their lives. I really loved your story, it was a good read. I don't think that your should be ashamed of this story because it's great and flamers can just go to hell. In fact, I read this story because of your "STAY AWAY" summary. I hope you continue writing cause your pretty good at it.

wow. that was just a and a half.

Aw, man; this is too rich. The parents? Torture much?

Lol. I frickin love Rose.

I THOUGHT U SAID SEQUAL? THAT WASNT A SEQUAL! :(

i didnt like this, it was confusing and hard to follow (at the end anyway) all i really got out of it was that she was engaged to devon, but now shes engaged to Lore (wanna know something sad? i just read this all this story today and i forgot his name) this was a good story but i wish that u would make a sequal. u said not to read it cuz u were tired of flames, but i thought it was good!

hope u make a sequal!

I didn't like it.

I loved your characters, they were all so weird and fitting. And I loved the way you wrote it, you did a good job. I just didn't like it in general, like the plot...

You are amazingly talented

this is so good

I practically told everyone in my school about this story

-waynesworldx3

Oh and by the way I'm totally sprung on Lore

Hey, this is good! Don't know why'd people trash it. Anyone can start writing young, you just have to have the perseverence to do it. Good story though, wouldn't have been able to tell you had written it when you were 14 if you hadn't told me.