Reviews for Heat |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Aww. I like it, I kind of thought this was the ending though... |
![]() ![]() ![]() "She wondered if anyone would notice if she shot him in the crotch"- that is so funny. Jack should know not to intentionally try and piss off a girl that is armed and dangerous. jeez. hehe, watching characters mix work with pleasure, even if it was by accident is great. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Best story ever! :] |
![]() ![]() ![]() YOU ARE AMAZING! and if you don't update soon don't be suprised to find a toaster you your bathtub, even tho that wouldn't solve the lack of story...nevermind bad idea. Just update. :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! The whole story is great! Katerina is one of my favorite names and I love , tell me the story happens in D.C. so Jack isn't really going anywhere. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ROFL! This is great! It's kinda late now, so I'll keep reading the rest of the story tomorrow. ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() man u picked the wrong time to lose interest in this. update damn it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story, so don't get me wrong. I just saw one mistake! I like to envision how my characters look (especially the guy...yum) and, well, you said Jack had hazel eyes before, and then later on you said he had green eyes. 'The man looked at her, his hazel eyes wide.' and 'Standing before her was the six foot, brown haired, green-eyed mistake.' Just a hole in the story, nothing big...I just wanted to point it out so you could fix it. So, what's it gonna be, hazel eyes or green eyes? It doesn't make a difference to me, I think both are hot. (although hazel eyes are a whole lot more uncommon in stories) You're on my fav's list! |
![]() ![]() ![]() there seems to have been a long break between now, and the last time you updated... i seriously hope that you haven't given up on this story. It's fantastic. I mean, I'm in study block, and completely bored, and you've stolen my attention (which usually lasts for about 3-6 seconds) for the last 45 minutes. Well done, my teachers would commend you. ;) seriously, I hope you update in the near future: I'll be looking out for the next chapter. |
![]() ![]() ![]() You always end in a cliffhanger, don't you? For my SATs I had to end on a cliffhanger and it was hard for me. First of all, time limits and me don't go together. Secondly, I can't do cliffhangers. You make it look really easy (it probably is for you, isn't it?). There were a few spelling mistakes but nothing major. Good plot by the way. I liked how you got straight into the story right from the beginning. Update fast! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh no! they just admitted they loved each other and he's getting transferred? that really sucks. i hope they let him turn down the transfer. can't wait for more, please update soon ~ Alenor. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Damn. How's he going to tell Kate? Update soon! Peace. |
![]() ![]() ![]() very nice.. and funny too :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() o...this is good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() YAY! He didn't die! :) Woot, made my night. Keep writing! |