Intriguing. I'm very interested to see where you take this. Can't wait to see how it continues.

My main suggestion on this so far is just to work on show not tell. There are several instances where you tell the reader a big paragraph of info, but if you could put it through a conversation or scene...it could be much mroe effect.

I'll try to get up to the later chapters ASAP, I really want to see where this goes from here.

Khenna

Awesome! Silveraven and Tolren battle it out...And I never really thought about how they - Tolren, and Cait, and Silveraven - must feel about Ady creating them. Technically...they aren't real, is basically what she's telling them. So strange...

Anywho, good so far. I didn't see a grammar or spelling error. It felt a little rushed, but that could just be me (I mean, Gryphon's Feather is going NOWHERE...). So all in all, good story!

Oh...my God! You are so brilliant. The twist is so awesome. And I love the relationship you portray between Cait and Donovan - in which he calls her 'mother.' I swear, I never would have thought of this. Only a couple of typos to be found, but really, that's all I can see. Great job!

Ah, finally! More of One Wish...

I love where you're taking this. I never really liked stories where the author gets sucked into his/her stories, but I'm so into this one - it's so awesome.

Anyway, there's not really much to fix. You're beginning to rush a little - not much, but noticeably - into the main idea a tad bit. Elaborate, maybe, some more on details, like what the environment is and how it feels and everything. A have a mental picture in my head, and I'm sure it's fairly accurate, but I want to be able to follow along completely.

Really, those are the only things I found wrong. I love Ady - she's a very strong, resourceful and stable woman, and you keep her very much in character. The plot is obvious and well-stated, so we're not left in a state of confusion. I love this story - so far, an awesome job!

wow. i really like where ur takin it. i can't wait to read more. ~gangsta gurl

omg...i lovedtihs...i cant wait until what she does...o the suspennse is killing...can't wqait what happens next...SO GOD

Wow! This is so awesome! I can't wait to see what Ady/Anala does. You are an incredibly gifted, beautiful, and unique writer - I can't wait for an update (and I hope one comes soon!).

This is actually very good! I admit, I wasn't holding my breath, and I was prepared for a rather monotonous story. The only thing I did find wrong was a couple of grammatical and spelling errors, and the misuse of punctuation, and a little bit of choppy and mechanical writing here and there, but all in all, I think you've done really well so far.