i rather liked this story, nice plot and characterization. i think you probally have a chance of getting it published so i wish you the best of luck. the way the story ended though made the reader, or me at least, suppose there would be a sequeal with all the weird fellings and stuff. well i'm off to look for one now so ta ta

All I can say is: wow. This is a very original story line. *showers you with praise, cookies, and icecream*

Back to happy relationships, eh? Liked her nightmares; very appropriate.

Well, got to go now. I'll get to more later.

Gryph

Hm... Not much to say here.

*shakes head* Silly Arielle. Assassining is never a way to make your professor proud, unless its his despised enemies.

She did it? Dama. She and Thorne were getting along so well...

*amused* Honestly. Ronan would be ticked if she told him, but more ticked if he found out from someone else. And besides, professional solidarity suggests that all the Deaths would stand against someone trying to blackmail another.

*blinks* Jealous Ronan? Of someone who was a baby when he met her? Whoa...

Even odds say that Thorne was supposed to be her next target.

*cocks head* So if she'd accepted that the job was alright, then why didn't she tell Ronan? She obviously knows something's off. Still too proud to ask for help?

*laughs* The blackmail bit. But Edan never did find out who her mentor was, did he?

*surprised* So he can't tell when she uses her gift? Odd. Somehow I expected he would be able to. And should be interesting if Edan tries to blackmail her with his knowledge of her murders later.

Yep. Assassination. But I doubt it will make Ronan happy at all.

Hrm. I thought Edan might have been the current Death, but I suppose not. And I can see why he would want a girl who could kill with a kiss working for him very easily indeed...

*laughing* Arrogant is the perfect way to describe her at the moment. God; "And it’s Arielle, not Ariel." *shakes head* Poor, naïve childling.

Hm... Like Ronan's philosophy.

Seems to me that a necromancer would want to be on Death's side, as their positions cover the same sort of ground. *shrugs* Still neat.