Reviews for Love & Magic
dfghjklcvbnmm chapter 5 . 7/15/2010
hah obsessed
dfghjklcvbnmm chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
6 seconds :L
rosieroo chapter 11 . 6/7/2010
Hey! I was just reading this and I thought I'd offer some advice:

The storyline is wonderful. The whole Kaze/Cass/Kyle thing drew me in! But i don't think you've developed it enough - it needs more detail. It kind of just jumps from one scene to another, and suddenly they're in love! Also, when Chris sees 'Kyle' after he dumped her in the water, he recognises her as Kaze for a moment. And yet later on, when she doesn't have the glamour on, he doesn't recognise her as Kaze. I think there is a bit of an inconsistency there.

But other than that, i think with a bit of work this could be an awesome story!
momo3069 chapter 14 . 4/9/2010
So now I did read the first and the second story of Cloud City today. Just one to go and I have read them all in one day. But your stories are just catching. I like to read them now and again.
Songorita chapter 14 . 5/30/2009
Great story I loved it I'm so adding it to my favorites. I can't wait to read more of your stories.
K chapter 14 . 4/6/2009
A very sweet story. Although, it has the potential to be more adventurous like a Tamora Pierce story. I really enjoyed reading it but (and I know this is one of your earlier pieces but it still holds true in your newer ones as well) you need to watch your grammar (verb tense, diction, spelling and punctuation) but the story itself is very good. Keep up the great work. You tell wonderful stories!
reader chapter 11 . 7/7/2008
NEW FAVORITE! seemed btw
reader chapter 10 . 7/7/2008
fee - feel

planed - planned

WOW, things are shaping up...I totally did NOT think the mess could be resolved in the chapters left when I read the last chapter. I love how you make things plausible, but not too lengthy.
reader chapter 9 . 7/7/2008
I am so, so, so sorry for Chris. This is too depressing.
reader chapter 7 . 7/7/2008
I like her lists a lot.

quite down - quiet down

and periods instead of commas for

"You asked,”


“I did not,”
reader chapter 6 . 7/7/2008
Hahaha, you are such an amazing author.
reader chapter 5 . 7/7/2008
OH MY GOD, I am SO excited for the rest of this story
reader chapter 4 . 7/7/2008
I LOVE how Kaze called Ajax "that stupid horse" and then goes BAM BAM when Chris calls Ajax "that stupid horse."

reader chapter 3 . 7/7/2008
Dickhead is a good insult. I might use it.

it's - he's a

"bother of the King of Mhalta, thought" - brother...though
reader chapter 2 . 7/7/2008
seamed - seemed

I'm not reading for errors, but I'll point them out when they jump out at me. Hope you don't mind.
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