Ooh, interesting so far :3 I want to read on, definitely! One suggestion, though. I think you should try to avoid using their names so much, for the sake of word flow. But other than that - great job! I'm really liking it so far. Why do you have so little reviews? ( It makes me mad when a good story isn't appreciated enough.

make the characters speak more rather than ay things such as"the conversation in the car was pleasant"other than that its a very good story line

This is cool! I'm really starting to get into this story. Update soon!

Well. What is this story. Let me tell you. This story was short and sweet kinda like Sage. I want a continuation. When stories can make you want to know these people and be a part of them then a writer as succeded. Lets hope thats where you are going with this. I would love to get a large file with a collection of this as soon as it becomes avaible. But for the critizisms. Ill wait till it progresses some. 7 outta well w/e you want it to!Be an individual and decide!

Hey, cool story! I like the characters. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Update, Update, Update!

I likey. Give me more!