Reviews for Firelight
NotA-Frayed chapter 1 . 6/17/2005
i'm very tempted to correct a lot of wordings... I think i will. lol. ok. i really like it, but there are some wrinkles in the rythm. try taking out two syllables from a few lines (example... "you are so brighlty lit" changed to "you are so bright.") now, dont get me wrong, its good. just smooth the wrinkles and it will be perfect. ;) i do like it a lot. great job, keep it up.