Reviews for When Doves Cry |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I would definitely not trust Alyssa. She's like a snake waiting in a bush. |
![]() ![]() ![]() ugh, why is Elliot being so damn difficult! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I wish I had a friendship like they share. |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh man, why did he have to step away from her. he was being so selfish. Can't he think about her instead of how he's going to be alone? |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! I felt so terrible for her |
![]() ![]() ![]() aw, this was very sweet. I particularly like the part where they start talking about who owns who. That was funny. |
![]() ![]() ![]() good story, but unnecessarily drawn out sometimes. nicely done tho :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cute story but it was a bit boring and long. I think things could have moved a bit quicker, but it was still very interesting :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() The playful banter between Adrian and Ellie is adorable but your grammatical errors is making it hard for me to keep up x_x I still really like how the story is going though :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() I thought this was really cute but in need of a read-over. There were some minor mistakes but besides that, I liked it :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() well i like it so far! i am drawn in already by the way you have already shown an established relationship at a young age. it makes it more understanding on what will happen in the story, love CharlieandLola |
![]() ![]() I just finished reading your story and I must say that I am fairly impressed all around. However, one thing about it irks me to no end. The story title comes from the song she chose for her final dance before the cancer could take over. You talk about her practicing and everything. Why isn't the actual performance a part of the story? I know that Adrian is going through a lot at that time, but since you wrote in split pov why isn't Elliot's piece in there? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Gr8 story I lvd it |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hate Alyssa! shes such a bitch, and Adrian is so stupid, :( i dont like him anymore! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I agree, Adrian is so stupid, telling her he loves her? ughh. |