Youve really captured the essance of life in this poem. I like it, but like youve said, it seems more like a story. Perhaps you could convert some of your poems into stories because you like stories more. SO this would just be like a brainstormer

Hm. It would do well to add some rhyme. The whole thing has this awesome potential, and it feels frustrated. It's a rhymed poem stuck in free verse. BUt I like it. It's not often that the subject is like, "Doubt it." hehehehe