|Reviews for collapse,|
| FrozenKiwi chapter 1 . 1/8/2006
Your poems creep me right the hell out. Good job!
| vonlan chapter 1 . 8/17/2005
o... i have no clue what to say to this, but this is a fairly easy to understand poem if you're speaking of an event.
i can't judge an event, but what you wrote seems easily flowed..
| citrus scented chapter 1 . 8/12/2005
christ, this is just...wicked. taut and bitter to read, wonderfully written.
| AntiPleasure chapter 1 . 7/7/2005
I like your styles. Most are quick to the point when telling a story and the images are painfully portrayed. Nicely done.
| Phat Models chapter 1 . 7/4/2005
sure how I could describe this...it was definately different...but I liked it.
| lackluster chapter 1 . 7/2/2005
i'm amazed with this poem. its definetly odd but it works. nicely done
| AboveTheSalt chapter 1 . 6/27/2005
ahh. this is beautiful. very unique subject choice and stanzas. i love the topic; oh so relate-able & captivating. lovely word choices, too. great poem.
| kalmia raphael chapter 1 . 6/26/2005
kind of surreal and sunglazed. a lifeguard that was a few minutes too late to save some kids or the waves were too strong so they killed him. funny that something so tragic can be discerned from a sandwich. very lyrical and pretty, ironically so. makes me think of people's old vacation photos.
| Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 6/23/2005
What a prevalent image you write of.
| and flowers chapter 1 . 6/22/2005
hm. i think that i like it a lot
| linaeve chapter 1 . 6/22/2005
ugh. what terrible timing, truly.
| negligible fictional force chapter 1 . 6/21/2005
god, i just love the concept so much. -wallflower.
| miyoo chapter 1 . 6/21/2005
wow you are good _
| always gats b y chapter 1 . 6/20/2005
Ahh, I'm in love with this one! Nicely written. I loved the ending.
| Kristina chapter 1 . 6/20/2005
Wow Claire! This is fantastic! Beautifully written!