|Reviews for Pathways of Darkness|
| the shattered star chapter 2 . 4/23/2009
Hmm... I must say I liked morally ambiguous better... But this wasn't bad. I mean, it wasn't horrible or anything... The enormous list of terms kind of overwhelmed me ;-) Hmm... What can I say? I'm sure you're aware of your weak points in this. I liked the description much more in morally ambiguous. This was more... STOP EVERYTHING AND DESCRIBE. I think that's understandable though; it is the beginning of the story ;p OK, well, I suppose I'll keep reading (maybe) but I think you've truly improved as a writer since you published this! OK, that's it from me. ~ the shattered star (romantic vampire lover)
| KizunaIatari chapter 30 . 7/11/2007
wow, thx for posting this story. the whole trip has been interesting to say the least. and the vocabulary you use practically fills the dictionary. pat yourself on the back, this is one of the good stories.
| yourworstnightmare666 chapter 1 . 7/10/2007
why, hello. it is me again. *evil laugh*. i was just wondering. you say that this story is really old and it sucks and you only have it on here for your own enjoyment. Please do us all a favor and take it off this website so only you can "enjoy" it. Oh and you left a comment in your profile about how i was too scared to say who i really was and to have an e-mail and whatnot. but i wonder are you too afraid to answer to my comments, or do you just have no defense against them?
| CandleQueen chapter 3 . 6/30/2007
A little better this chapter, especially with the legend. When you say that Duffikus said all of that to the queen with his last dying breath...hell, that must have been one long breath! lol And I think you could have done without the swearing, since the legend was being told to children in the story.(I think the dragon lady would have altered it a bit for their sake.) You still need to learn how to make your characters more captivating. Have you ever read one of Stephanie Meyer's books? Her character's are always amazingly well developed. You might learn something...
| CandleQueen chapter 2 . 6/30/2007
Your right, the first chapter was boring. I expected more from you, Lccorp2. I'm kinda dissapointed. Maybe it heats up, I don't know...
| Sabriel Skye chapter 2 . 12/4/2006
I was actually entirely intrigued by these two companions. What is their purpose? Their journey? Their struggle?
All of these questions fuel my desire to keep reading, so I shall finish another chapter tomorrow.
Very well written, indeed. Even though it was really short, it was very "to the point" without any of that unnecessary flowery language that most writers are guilty of (I, myself, as well ]). It's nice to see that sometimes!
I feel more drawn to L'zul, maybe because he seems to have some underlying power that is memorizing already! He even seems to have some grip over Garradan, which I don't quite understand yet. But again, that all comes with reading more.
| Lccorp2 chapter 1 . 11/17/2006
Have you seen how LONG AGO this was written? Even I put up on my profile that this is only around ehre for me to laugh at.
| Makone chapter 3 . 11/16/2006
i'm interested enough in this story to review it, but for someone who rants about generic fantasy, this seems to contain a lot of elements of it. i realise this is an old story of yours, but although not completely cliched, this contains:
-an imprisoned and imperiled female, who is a *white* wolf. why white? more feminine and dainty?
-a persecuted minority race
-wit in the vein of Terry Pratchett
-the suffix 'kin' to describe a rare thought-to-be-dead race
-a rare thought-to-be-dead race, who imparts wisdom unto the protagonist with mystery
-gratuituous apostrophes in names.
-exposition in story-tale form.
-a key terms summary page, much of which is standard fantasy fare.
This is not intended as a malicious flame, particularly, but given that you seem to have several fantasy-parodies looking into cliches, i'm surprised to find so many in your own work.
| bookface31 chapter 2 . 9/10/2006
This is another very interesting story, and I like it a lot. I'll have to read more of it later, since I need to get offline in a bit. But the storyline is interesting me very much. I love a good werewolf favorite line in chapter two was, “And you think I, the great worrier, hasn’t worried about that yet?” L’zul snapped.I just think it's funny.I'll keep reading.I like it.
| Barbados chapter 26 . 7/25/2006
Each of the emotions are one word, except for a grudging respect. Why wasn't it just: respect? I enjoyed the repetition with of the pay attention line. The speed at which L'Zul upped the training seemed a bit odd to me, but I'm sure there's a reason, you usually have one.
| Megabyte chapter 3 . 7/7/2006
Interesting. I like it. I'll have to read it later, since my mother is making me clean my room and your story is so long, but I definately like it.
| Troubled Flux chapter 2 . 7/4/2006
| Barbados chapter 25 . 7/4/2006
Heyla!It's good to be reading this again. Alas, my FP hiatus has put me farther behind than ever! :( I'd forgotten hos good this was though. I might just have to reserve reviews until the end, unless I spot something particularly blatant (doubtful.) I'll never get caught up if I stop and tell you how good it is every 2500 words.
| Karuli chapter 2 . 6/28/2006
Wow, great first chapter. If you don't mind my saying, I also find your way of thought amusing. And you're right, books tend to follow a "chosen one" who never has to do anything for him/herself and just "happens" to become a hero, but a little kick-start won't hurt, like some strange seer coming to town and uttering words of future happenings or whatnot. Anyways, captivating first chapter. Good job : D. Hope to read more of your works later on.
| warnthepenguins chapter 3 . 6/14/2006
It's not grabbing me. The whole place feels a little like a cheap set, like not a lot of energy was lavished on the backdrops or the characters. The only real descriptions are slapped in each time a main character or a representative of a new race is introduced - then we get hair color, skin tone, eyes, maybe a scar or two. Obviously you've put a lot of work into your stuff, though. I haven't done much more than dip my toe in the water.