Reviews for Pathways of Darkness |
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Yemaya chapter 2 . 9/18/2005 I'm interested in this, I don't think the glossary was a good idea though, it probably helps, but it's not something you want to see straight off. I like your names though. And I hope to read more of this later. |
Casey Drake chapter 23 . 9/18/2005 HEY! that's MY story... otherwise cool. :) CD |
CabbyHat chapter 22 . 9/17/2005 Ack! I finished reading the story! Now I have to know what happens next!*sigh* reading quickly is a mixed blessing... |
Barbados chapter 9 . 9/17/2005 NOTE: Amendment to previous review, that of chapter 12. I meant to say: This chapter, yes, but that's NOT all. Er, btw, chapter 9 is good too. :P |
Barbados chapter 12 . 9/17/2005 Wow, a milestone. The chapter, yes, but that's all. I finally reached the point you were at when I began reading this story. You've doubled it in size since then! I can honestly say that I'm very interested in the next eleven chapters. To anyone just visiting, this is a great story! I see what you meant by the humor waning a little as the story progresses. I'm glad it's not all gone, only more subtle. I can't believe how far these two have come since their banter in the woods in Beginning. By the way, I like your catchy one-word title setup. Since my e-mail is littered with author-alerts, I'll have to play catch up later. Looking forward to it though! |
CabbyHat chapter 11 . 9/15/2005 Ooh, the plot thickeneth...I like how you haven't succumbed to the all-too-common temptation and had Iryane and L'zul instantly fall deeply in love... I really like the interesting element that having them argue lends! |
CabbyHat chapter 4 . 9/15/2005 Once again, w- ah, what the heck. I'm more articulate than once again, I have nothing but praise to offer. And I can tell that *SOMEBODY* has been reading Discworld...Gnomeball. *snerk*... |
CabbyHat chapter 3 . 9/15/2005 Wow. Um.I'm only on chapter 3, and already... is... extremely well-written. Have you ever considered publishing it?I'm looking forward to reading the rest of Thank you... or thank Lord Duffikus, anyway... for reviewing my story. I just don't feel worthy... |
Verus-nomen chapter 4 . 9/13/2005 Very entertaining! Your setting and culture is well-planned and coherent. I enjoy the sardonic wit immensely. My only criticism is try to cut down on some minimal wordiness, especially if a character is talking. otherwise, very smooth flow and an easy read |
Krvinma chapter 11 . 9/11/2005 Ok, enough with the Lord of the Rings references. 1. Gimli2. Nazghul plains...it's close enough, alright?3. mithril |
rrmehta364 chapter 21 . 9/11/2005 same things as usual. Like the golden everythng but i just cant imagine |
Islandbreeze chapter 7 . 9/8/2005 A nice chapter, more detail here than other chapters, and the little bit at the end was really interesting. "See? She understands! Come on, where’s your terminally outmoded sense of chivalry and honour just when you need it, L’zul?” the brown-haired, wiry one whispered." lol ...some funny banter yet again Ihtek is an interesting name, and her whole interaction with the wolf is a cool part. "Duffikus"? hm...the name seems familiar...can't think where I've heard it before though...:) Some cliffs even just in this chapter, now some nice suspense! Nice job |
Islandbreeze chapter 5 . 9/8/2005 OKay, so I went back to review ch. 5 cause I felt lazy... "All the better, he thought."-Since that is in italics, it's given that it's a thought, and you don't need to say 'he thought.' "At least he’s bothered to keep his pants on and his tail under that, Garradan thought."-same thing as before "What have I told you about eating people?”" lol:) The description of L'zul as part beast was nice and detailed, good imagery. "heir blazing torches and most of all, the horrible, shining silver weapons, silver which would upon mere contact char and burn a werewolf, would promise the most painful death to him if he was caught." That bit was nice descrption as well. Nice chapter, I like your characters, and the plot is moving along well. Since I already read ch.6 I know what's going on... but still, it would be building more tension:) |
Barbados chapter 11 . 9/8/2005 Another great chapter (not that I doubted it would happen.) Dwarves! (On a side not, I did not at the time realize that the next chapter of the shorts was about dwarves... you know of what I speak.) At any rate, yes, the part with the slap is a bit confusing in how it is presented. You use that technique, if you want to call it that, often, and you use it well. It was just this one instance that didn't come across as well as you usually do. (As an example, the part where L'zul gets knocked out uses the same technique in a good way... you know of what I speak.) On a very side note, I think Casey Drake reminds me a little of the Librarian. If he only said Ook, instead of oo, and then nothin else, it would be perfect. (You know of what I speak.) |
spiffy-sophia chapter 20 . 9/7/2005 I'm sorry I haven't read your updates in forever, haha. I've been having writer's block and not coming to the site as much. Anyway, I'm glad we finally found out why D'raenor's important to the story, and that we're finding out more about L'zul's past. The interest is building with every chapter; kudos to you. Haha. You sometimes didn't really use the italics correctly, but that's not such a major problem. Update soon! (And yes, I am a hypocrite, given that I haven't updated in about three weeks.) |