not boring at all. In fact, it was a rather intriguing start. I love how detailed you were in your descriptions of your characters, and they both seem to have their own set personalities already, great job. I believe that this will be an excellent read; you have a descriptive and clear writing style, and you seem to have put a lot of thought and imagination into the creation of your characters and world! I'll definitely come back and continue reading this one!~SCR

The glossary is an interesting idea...good job, I'm sure I'll refer back to it and find it useful while reading the rest of your story :)

oo... what is going on here?

:) CD

Too lazy to sign in...pehh...

So, I loved the way this chapter started out with the joke, and then the dry humor about the wars...nice

"The wound had healed a long time ago, not even leaving a scar, and the blood on the bandage had dried to a rust-brown, but still…best not to arouse suspicion."-That sentence sounded a little awkward to me, maybe if you broke it up? Other than that, grammatically everything seems fine.

Good work on building character little by little, makes it more real, and a good chapter on the whole.

Awesome chapter! It definately seems like something is building up, and it seems like it's something unpleasant. Just a couple things: If you trek up the peak of Mount Theror, they (which...), you can find.." This doesn't fit right. I think you accidentally left something out. Also, "...and itis just upon one of these roads that the three werewolves found themselves upon..." Too many upons. Fear not, for I remain a devoted fan!

Sorry, fiction press is making me do my review in two bits. Too much bold. Dunno why, but i feel bold almost always takes away from any writing. There's probably a better way to show excitement. The beginning was a little shakier then the ending, because nothing really happened but I still liked having a little time to know the place. I'm a bit divided on all the mentioning of earthish stuff. ONe one hand its funny but on the other hand it reminds me too much of home. The biggest problem would have to be was in some areas (key word some) the description was a little vague. It's hard to catch it because the world you created is so well thought out and defined, so i kno you know what things look like, but sometimes i dont. I hope that makes sense.

I'm kind of sorry i didn't find specific things cause i forgot to do that while reading and now im too lazy to go back and read again. Sry. But i think this defiantely an awesome story and u just got entered into my favorite authors list.

This has got to be one of the best stories ive read so far. I really like the style of your writing, there's a good bit of detail so i can imagine the place fairly well. More importantly, its quite obvious how well the world you created is plotted. It seems as if there's a huge backstory to everything and there's a definate direction to the story. Also, i get the feel there's a huge story taking place that we're not involved in yet.

interesting beginning. I like how you introduce your characters. Please don't have too many people with crazy sounding names. MAkes it hard to read.

Hey! Thanks so much for having Lord Duffkin read through my story!

I've only read the first chapter so far, but I really like how you leave things to the reader to figure out and put the imagination to work, such as alluding to an inside joke and hinting that something is different about these two without explicitly explaining what. I think I tend to accidentally explain things to death when I write, but I like that feeling that the author wants me to figure something out myself. Hopefully I'll get to read more of this in the next few days!

Here are some minor things I noticed - They were so few and far between that I thought I might as well point them out, but please don't hesitate to tell me if my nitpicking is annoying! I think plot and character development are far more important:

" The strangest thing about them was the was their backpacks were..." - just a minor typo with the "was the was" part

"Finally, one of them spoke up.“L’zul, what on Arkon are you worrying about?” The wiry one spoke up" - maybe use a different word than "spoke up" in the second sentence to make it sound more diverse?

"Garradan brushed the crumbs off himself and feel in step with his companion."

It's taking me a while to get through this, I know, but so many reviews to do! But the cool part is... I love it so much it's always one of the first ones I come back to when I leave the 'Just In' and make my rounds reviewing favorite authors. Also, the humor is definately a great reprieve from everything else I come across, so THANK YOU!

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:) CD

Interesting beginning. I didn't see any spelling or grammar mistakes, or anything like that. I like the two characters you introduced, they seem like smart, everyday guys, except for the subtle hints that they are not. I also love the names you thought up. Very original, and they stick in your mind. I'll be looking forward to reading your next few chapters. Keep up the good work.

So it is these Eight that plague him. and i suppose part of their consciousness is in those runes D'raneor found?

Things start to come together...

:) CD

Great, this is great! A very fun read so far. Love your writing style.

oo... interesting. and btw, i got the review-response-in-profile idea from Celyn.

:) CD