Nuts to rationing, I ended up reading the rest...

The last few chapters of this could have been expanded, the last chapter expecially, that could have been two, three chapters easily instead of being crammed as a final wrap-up.

Honestly, I was sorta dissapointed in the last chapter, Lord Duffikus, as hilarious as he was, is kind of out of place in the climax of the epic-ness with his funni-ness... Did that make sense? I'm kinda in a rush here...

Also, I don't think Garradan got enough mourning after "the incident". He just kinda dropped off the face of the earth, not even a stray tear from his long-time friend L'zul. Same with same with D’rakkor, (not the mourning part, the dropping off part...) it's a shame L'zul didn't even acknowledge Garradan in the end, he can name a kid or a town after him or something... lolz

This was a good read, Can't wait for TG. a whole new jar of cookies, it's mouth watering...

The last few chapters have surprisingly been relaxed when one considers what's in stored for them. The calm before the storm? It's a nice pause from all epic drama.

Hmm, C’intha ... will I be seeing her and D’raneor in Tarnished gold? Well, I suppose I'll find out soon enough... only six more cookies left in the cookie jar, I suppose I should ration them...

Ah, the intrigue, just who is "she" anyways? I have a guess, but I'll keep it to myself for now...

Interesting, the black flights also use guns? Very interesting...

Along the course of reading this, I had a very disturbing idea, especially when the the Black flights came for the "you-know-what". Since werewolves can survive such a butchering, will they be able to survive being carved up for meat? Like what if they kept a werewolf or two in the scorched lands and carved them up like a holiday turkey every now and then? It's a grizly thought, having a sort of meat farm like that...

I can't wait to see what happens in the near future...

I'm one of those people that needs to read things in order-so I started with Pathways regardless of your disclaimer.

It's not actually as bad as you seem to think. Sure it can use some polishing, but the characters and plot are both well executed.

My favourite aspect of the story was most definitely the characters-you have a nice range of characters that a reader can really get attached to.

If you ever plan on editing this I do have a few suggestions:

The random blobs of information were interesting, but it's confusing when they occur randomly. Perhaps you can just put them all at the beginning of the chapter like you began doing at some point. While liking/disliking them is up to the individual, *I* liked them-they were Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy-esque and made me smile.

The random Evil for Dummies stuff...most (if not all) of those are from the Evil Overlord List by Peter Anspach and Jack Butler. I can't remember if you have a disclaimer stating that they belong to someone else...but if not, you may want to add that in somewhere.

Lord Duffikus makes me giggle-for some reason I think of Duff beer o.0 Maybe I watch far too much Simpsons. His entrance in the final chapter was so...anticlimatic. As a reader, you had me on edge and then I just sat there staring at the monitor in shock-it seemed like Duffikus was a bumbling idiot as opposed to an evil overlord whilst his Eight were the real power.

The last couple chapters were really rushed. Perhaps you can go back and expand them a little? Make the ending not that jam-packed with action?

Garradan dies! While that's ok because the hero needs a loss...you didn't exactly follow through with that. It was like Garradan died and no one cared. That was also carried through by the L'zul and Iryane coupling at the end. While that's all and good-especially because you've been subtly hinting at it for a while-perhaps the inclusion of a mourning section would be nice.

Other than that, I really liked your story, the plot was well woven and I really did fall in love with your characters. You did a great job, and I'm definitely going to read the sequel at some point.

Keep writing!

Danica

Tall hooded being eh? interesting... very interesting... everything is starting to converge and make sense... but there is still much left unanswered. I just can't get enough of this.

dum dum dum. Oh the suspense, a lot was revealed in the last few chapters, but it raises up many more questions and leaves them unanswered. Can't wait to read on.

If its CC you want, I can't really say much besides the need to proof read a bit, there were some parts that really didn't makes sense at first glance. But it just could be me...

This is good stuff.

That was a nice chunk of chapters, funny stuff. Zubangfers, lolz.

The story is moving along quite nicely, but the POV hopping every few paragraphs is sorta confusing, but your talent for conveying the story more than makes up for it.

Hmm... Iryane taking careful note of the mythril... interesting...

Hmm...honestly, I don't really see why you think so poorly of this. It's not horrible, I've seen worse, far worse.

Besides from the scattered, out of place info dumps (city recipe, sock bugs, etc) I found this a good read. To be specific, I like your characters. Nothing flashy, just friends trying to get by, spliced with a little flavor of foreshadowed problems, lolz.

I'll be looking forward to what the future holds for them.

Well it's been a while, and I'm sure other reviewers have had a lot to say too, but I'll just put in my own comments.

It's definitely a nice way of first bringing up the werewolves' plight of being unaccepted first, then driving in into larger things. Namely, the wars that's been going on with the Black Flight.

It does seem rather convient in the manner that D’raneor and the three meet up, that's pretty much the only thing about the plot that bothers me. It could have been better to have them meet up after say, a squabble in town and such, but we all can't be perfect, heh.

I sincerely wasn't expecting the death of W’rmthalak, and now that his Black Flight mate is left alone (or rather with their child)...I guess it's more of the setting up for Tarnished Gold.

D’raneor seems to want to follow the overlord's decison of making a different flight's dragonkin hs mate...that'll complicate things too.

L’zul is another one who's well played out throughout the entire story. It's always interesting looking into his dark background, and the past that haunts him. But it seems a bit odd that he's not thinking of Garr at the end. One would wonder why he wasn't affected as much by his long time companion's death, but he is rather resilliant to such things.

Despite this being one of your earlier works, I still enjoyed it a lot. I'll be looking up the coming stories, definitely.

I hate to reply to reviews for my stories by using my reviewers' stories to answer, but this really was the only way I could answer quickly.

It wasn't disclosed whether or not the "Evil Queen" really did remarry or not. Remember, this was written from her point of view so she may have decided to keep some things to herself. After all, she didn't know who would read it, and she probably wouldn't have wanted everyone to know her business. Her name didn't change after her first husband's death, but I'm assuming that's due to some choice of her own. Women don't have to change their names now when they marry so I don't see why she should.

The story wasn't supposed to be historically accurate. Like the Grimm Brothers' fairy tales, the world that Rianna the "Queen" lives in is somewhat close to what life may have been like in the medieval time period, but the things that happen are far too outlandish to actually be believable. I wasn't aiming for anything of the sort, but I'm sorry I didn't mention that in the author's note.

I'm not really sure why that would've happened. The "dwarves" went out all the time to do whatever it was they did, so maybe they discovered a new apple tree they'd never seen before, and took the apples without thinking there was danger. I never said that the "toxic substance" didn't get into any other crops; I just never mentioned them.

If this doesn't provide a good enough answer for your queries, please accept my apologies. I was half asleep and dying to get to bed at the time the last part was written, so I just threw it in haphazardly in hopes that it was a semi-realistic way for her to get ill. I wanted it to seem like the truth of the story had been twisted a little so Snow was the protagonist, but not a whole lot. I had to come up with some way for the poisonous apple to have a logical root.

I really am sorry if it doesn't make sense. I have to say, Archdemon Lord Duffikus is rather good at questioning the contents of a narrative. But I suppose he doesn't have a lot else to do on the Demonic Planes.

By the way, your story idea seems interesting, so I fully intend to read it all the way through. If I actually succeed in doing so I'll probably review a lot of chapters. I'm bad at remembering things, so I won't save it all for a big critique in the end.

Oh yes, sorry for such a long and pointless review. And for all the use of quotations.

-Eveiveneg

Hey, this story is really good! I like Garrandan heh he's funny. I liked how you put some back ground info into the story too! Nice job with this!

Very nice narrative hook, which arouses the reader's interest. . . different set of jaws. . . hmm? This is a nice blend of modern day weapons and a hint of fantasy with werewolves.

My favorite character is Garradan so far, but it seems slightly stupid to picka favorite character when I'm sure there are definately other people yet to meet.

You are right about appearences usually not being what they seem. No glaring spelling or gramatical mistakes. . . but sometimes I think I'm blind.

Thank you for your review, and if it was a flame it was original and constructive, which is all I ask for in a review.

I agree, I do hate spunky heroines that start crying every other chapter, but I'll try to answer some of your questions.

First of all, Rowan CANNOT quit, to join a mercenary band is to join for life, they have people trained to hunt down deserters. Rowan does blame himself, because he DID do something stupid, but that comes in later chapters. AND He most definately does not have a heart of gold. . . he's selfish, arrogant, angsty but he's really FUN to write, at least since I've started on chapter two. Try to make the world a better place? HAH! sorry, it's just. . . well, a lot of the jobs fromt he mercenaries are from Antony, and Rowan doesn't care one smidgen about the world, though a guess when it counts he can do the right thing.

No, the evil king is NOT insane. grr. . . I hate insane villians. If an author writes a good villian with plausible motives then that character has a good chance of becoming my favorite character. So he DOES have a reason.

Thank you, the new sentance structure does sound better.

AND I PROMISE that Christian Lightbringer was a coincidence, I meant he was called LIghtbringer because he is always the one who holds the lantern for the travelers.

Allya is actually dismounted, but looking back, I did not make that clear.

Thank you again, and keep writing. . .

-Arrow's Flight-

- Who is unfortunately grammatically blind when it comes to her stories (because all she can read was what she WANTEd to say in that sentance)-

Cool. Um, wow. I mean, you got a nice glossary here. Oh, and I just cracked up on the last entry...Zubangfer-a beach umbrella. Even now I chuckle to myself. I'm sorry, but I just found that really funny...probably because you have it surrounded by gods, and terms from you world, and even the Very Bad Word. Of course, I admit, I was a little bemused about that.

Now, I shall begin to tell you how I came across your story. I was looking at the reviews of a friend's story, and I found yours. Very long, and quite interesting in content. Detailed. You address quite a few things in the story that you thought awry. I am here referring to your review of Heatless Flame's story. Harsh, perhaps. Critical, definitely. You definitely strip it down...

And now I think you can quite guess what I would like you to do: Review mine! I am rather of the opinion that my story is a lot worse than his, since it's barely coherrent, but please, I request that you give me your opinion on my chapters, because I'm starting to rewrite them. (That was almost a runon) I would definitely like something to go off of, since I've already corrected most errors grammatically. I hope.

That is why I would like you to read it. I need some really...awakening outside input.

In the meantime I shall read and review your other chapters when I have time. (That means don't expect one review right after another)

Hm... I liked this chapter. Fairly calm, but we still got stuff done.

*grins* Wings and evil overlords. Wonderful.