|Reviews for The Promotion|
| jem chapter 33 . 1/10
This feels like it took a few years to write. It feels all over the place. The were a few grammar mistakes, but I genuinely enjoyed all the plot twists and liked the more realistic interpretation of the character of Wesley. Generally he's portrayed as "Oh he just loves you so you have to accept it, blah blah true love blah, destiny, soul mates, blah blah". It was an entertaining read, though Jenna annoyed me sometimes. She's suffering because he's not close to her but she put up so many barriers and rules at the beginning that she made it impossible for him to get close. She set up the scene so he couldn't do anything. I genuinely feel that if she'd been more affectionate at the beginning, they would have worked out. Not that I don't like Jon, he's more of what a relationship should have been. The other crazy thing was this all seemed to happen within a month, maybe month in a half 0_o. Waaaaaayyyy to soon to adopt. It felt like she had issues, like she couldn't live without having someone need and totally depend on her. I myself have always said I'm going to adopt instead of giving birth so I thought it was nice of you to be so altruistic and try to educate your readers. But because of the timeline it didn't feel real, and ended up feeling like they had issues. I get that you wanted them to have issues. Thanks for that, I really enjoyed their issues and it's a big part of why this story works. But her obsession with adoption was a little creepy and felt like it was rooted in deep psychological issues and/or there was a secret gold digging reason she didn't even acknowledge in her internal monologue. Wesleys obsession also felt a little creepy and like he had issues, though somehow you made it feel more natural for him than for her. Though I must say I love how you made her character grow thanks to Jon's example when she started talking straightforward with Wesley.
Over all I liked this story, it felt like a realistic take on this over used cliche. The only thing I really hated was Abby at the end. She just feels like a horrible opportunistic gold digger, and was so obviously interested in Wesley, even downright covertly pushy sometimes. I'd prefer a thousand times that he'd married and banged up some woman we don't know. That's the ONLY part I hated about this story. I don't mind that he's married and pregnant, I just hate that it's HER. It even feels premeditated on his side, like he was already making a backup. This was a very entertaining read, though a little rough around the edges. You've inspired me to read the rest of your stories. You took something cliche and made it your own and entertaining at the same time. It all felt like people with real issues. Thanks for taking the time to write this!
| emmacrade24 chapter 33 . 12/24/2015
The first thing I have to say is that your aggressive/passive aggressive notes at the beginning of the chapters towards haters were the best and they always made my day lol. Also I got wayyyyy to invested with this story, it was amazing and frustrating and made me so mad ugh! But like I said it was amazing and I'm happy with how it ended. Although Wesley makes me so mad! I really really liked him in the beginning and then he went on to do all that dumb crap! I still love him though and think he's a great guy even if he and Jenna weren't meant to be a good couple. Like I said I was way to invested but I loved every minute of it! Thank you for writing this! Also I read your other stories and they're just as amazing! Keep on with your writing because you are incredibly talented! Lots of love-emma crade
| Naomi Chick chapter 2 . 12/22/2015
So far, I'm loving it. It's refreshing.
| Silver chapter 23 . 10/6/2015
I hope Jenna ends up with Jon...
| TheGirlWithTheAngelMask chapter 32 . 9/26/2015
Well this was one of the best spent two days reading ever. Great story, I actually didn't see the Jon and Jenna thing happening until the end and I liked it. Also I know that this is weird and probubally not at all related to the story but for some reason when I think of Jon I think of the guy who plays Andy in the office, it's weird and probubally not correct at all but whatever
But in all seriousness this was a great story and I very much enjoyed it. Hope that you have a swell red of the day :D
| imperfectlyokay chapter 33 . 7/6/2015
Oh my god. I don't even know if you check reviews anymore but I just read this huuuuge story in about two days and man was it a ride. I was actually kind of surprised and unsurprised by other readers' reactions to Jenna (because god forbid we ever let a woman have any sexual freedom, right? Only guys have that privilege, right?) but during the whole Ukraine bit I found myself getting SUPER frustrated with her indecisiveness... And the fact that I was getting so annoyed is proof that you've written an amazingly three dimensional character. Amazing work! I really loved this story and I'm super happy with the way it ended, although I do think it waffled on a little too much when Jenna was trying to 'choose' - realistically, I doubt many guys would put up with that! Overall though I was practically suctioned to my phone and obsessed with finishing the story. Great work! I'm going to check out some of your other works now!
| thesideeffect chapter 1 . 5/26/2015
I don't know if you'll be able to read this because this story is sooo long ago. But I'll take a shot at it anyway because I want you to hear me out.
I loved your story...up 'till chapter 19, that is. I'm going to proceed with the things I love about the story first.
I mainly stayed and got hooked because of the witty banter and how well you transitioned the story of Wes and Jenna. I love Jenna's flaws and her awesome friendship with her mom. And also, you pack a hefty in each chappie and I absolutely love that.
Now to the con. One indication that I really loved your story is that I skipped to the ending to find out if I'm in for a heartbreaking ending or what. And when I found out that Jenna ended up with Jon, well...I wasn't happy to say the least. It's not a matter of being Team Wesley or John. I don't care who she ends up with. Look, there's nothing bad with veering off from the cliche. I liked how you attempted to do that with this story. But the way you executed it...didn't quite settle well with me. I know I have no right to say this because you're the author and you know your story better than I do but I might as well put my two cents into this in hopes that what Im going to say will be helpful.
You (unconsciously or not) fleshed out Wesley to be the guy Jenna ends up with. It's clear right from the summary and the first chapter. You built the readers's expectation and you also built Wes to be the guy she ended up with. It seemed to me that you decided ON A WHIM that Jon would end up with her instead. The love triangle wasn't well mapped out. Authors write in a way that clues in readers on who the protagonist ends up with. To do otherwise would be a pitfall. And that's what you did. If Jon really was the main character, not Wesley, then it should've been evident right off the bat.
| LisaIsAmazing chapter 25 . 5/14/2015
You forgot a certain someone...The girl who 'befriended' Jenna and was the second girl Trevor was dating...Just an important thought
| KarasunoFan chapter 23 . 1/2/2015
Whoa I have skipped the 3 hours of cardio i had scheduled today to read this. Super engaging and the drama has made my heart rate shoot up so high it's like I am doing cardio.
| jay chapter 5 . 10/30/2014
Yours chap are Too big
| Mistrelia of the Ice chapter 13 . 9/22/2014
Finally, this chick is starting to get some self-worth and maybe accept the fact that he likes her without all the goddamn excuses. And this chapter did help me out a bit with believing they're gonna adopt now. It's funny that I'm saying this since I'm the Queen of "I hate when relationships move too fast in stories" and trust me, I do, but damn girl, I hope she at least starts giving him a few allowances. Honestly though, the biggest hope for me is that the next time she sees Trevor, even if Wesley's out of the picture, she DESERVES so much better. I don't care if a woman is an incredibly dumb bitch with the worst background in the world, no woman should ever have to think they aren't worth a real man that loves them. As a bisexual, I wouldn't even dream of laying my hands on a woman. They're meant to be treated like stubborn, lovely jewels. For that reason, she doesn't need to scream or shout, but it would be nice if she had an honest (as safely supervised) chat with Trevor to end everything and truly move on. I will honestly hate this character if she even THINKS about him being in her life. I don't care how many promises, how many AA meetings, how many new jobs or whatever he does to clean himself up, as bad as it hurts, never let a man like that back even in your phone contacts. Settle everything, and walk away.
| Mistrelia of the Ice chapter 12 . 9/22/2014
Time to be honest, your story was really interesting so far but the fact that she's so determined not to love a man who's good for her but will obviously jump if Trevor asks her to once she gets back home is really pissing me off. That's just my impression of her. Either way, I'm also having a hard time believing this scenario. Who adopts a child with a person they're hell bent on not loving after one conversation? I'm all for adoption and would love to do it myself if I had the money or resources (hell, one of my greatest dreams is to be a mother, and giving a child a home who had none would be wonderful) but Jenna is starting to feel like a vapid woman who constantly uses excuses for every problem in her life, takes the easy way out, and is honestly a bit selfish. Yes, it's nice she wants to adopt, but once again, it's a bit of an inconceivable scenario. I'm not being convinced to believe this is she would do. She also really doesn't think. Lying is a bad thing yeah, but is she so selfish to not just indulge a little to help the man she cares about? Hell, is she really lying? She loves his family too. Oh but wait, I forgot she seems like the type to not love a guy unless he smacks her around a bit. Seriously, women have a bad habit of attaching themselves to garbage and then blaming the world instead of themselves when nothing goes right.
| Mistrelia of the Ice chapter 11 . 9/22/2014
I like this story but I'm slowly starting to not like your main character. There's a difference between self-deprecation and just plain stupidity. She didn't want Trevor arrested or to loose his job despite HITTING HER. She is perfectly okay with defending that FUCKING ASSHOLE but she is so determined to end everything with Wesley that she's not even giving him a chance. Fuck, I bet the first time he makes a mistake she's walking. Honestly, I feel bad for him and am really starting to get irritated with her. Just what more does he need to prove? And hell, if he does have a flaw, he's human! With all that he's done just to get her to even LIKE him you'd think she'd give the guy a damn bone.
| Mistrelia of the Ice chapter 4 . 9/22/2014
I CALLED THAT SHIT! I so called your plotline and I've been sitting here secretly hoping I was right and BOOM, you granted my wish! Yay!
| evelyn chapter 33 . 9/16/2014
NOOOOOOOOOO I WISH WESLEY AND JENNA GOT TOGETHER INSTEAD! :(