|Reviews for The Promotion|
| anon11345 chapter 5 . 6/18/2007
i am soo excited for ur next chapter . . . and i lvoe ur otehr story too! But u havn't updated in so long! please update soon!
| Salt and Vinegar Pringles chapter 5 . 6/7/2007
Aahhahhaa. Wow, that was hilariously entertaining!
You've developed a bunch of really interesting characters, which is always a delight when reading a story! I love it!
| RedMoonChick chapter 1 . 4/26/2007
ONE, Totally adore this story and "Brothers and Best friends" you're a really good writer! There's nothing cliche about what you write even though you'd think it would be (brothers best friend thing, lol)... Im really thankful for that because its so hard to find good stories nowadays!
TWO, the stories you write prove to me you're smart and original, and judging by your profile, it seems you like Veronica Mars as well, which further backs my opinion that you're smart. That show is the best show in the history of shows. lol.
THREE, update, and soon, please! :)
| socksNsandals chapter 5 . 4/22/2007
ah...no... why did u have to end it there... its really...i dont noe cheesey but not really lol does that make sense? but it is quite funny in a corny way lol
really loved it update soon plz
| jammi chapter 5 . 4/20/2007
I knew this was a set up, I wonder why she knows french so fluently? I know, random thing to get stuck in her head considering she's pretending to be the man's fiancee to his HUGE family that's apparently nice people, so it sucks to decieve them but at the same time, it's like what?
Yeah, you might want to comment on that somewhere, even if it's just to say she learned it for her own amusement.
I really like your writing style and so far the actual conversations haven't pulled me out of the story with is always a great feat and kudos to any author who can be amusing and it doesn't come out forced or jar you out of the story.
Now, I know there are different types of shyness but I know relatively few shy people, myself included who wouldn't be having an internal panic attack over being thrust into a household full of people I don't know but they think I'm his fiance. I mean, you could still function, like she did but I think there would be more of an internal response, like wanting to escape, and then there would be the gradual relaxing, she just seemed angry and then adjusted.
I do like her though, she's strong and even when she was a doormat she's great. I like the fact that she stands up to Wesley, she is obviously a nurturer. The type of woman who gets stuck with a jerk just because she knows he needs her even though he's bringing her down, and the fact that Wesley is obviously strong brings out the 'strong' person in her I guess, not the nurturer.
Speaking of Wesley, I was prepared to dislike him. Honestly, she's a sweetie and from that conversation with his cousin and her promotion I automatically thought he was going to take advantage of her, and then it happens and I was like, oh, okay. And now I'm fine with him lol.
woot on that kiss, that was great. And I liked the way she handled her ex, she didn't love him she knew that and it showed but she was still hurt. I don't know, I think the way you wrote it got it across a lot clearer than a huge scream fest that would've been out of her character.
Really liking the story so far, can't wait for the next chapter )
| jammi chapter 2 . 4/19/2007
Her mother is amazing, chapter two and already I ADORE her, lol
""You'll forget me. By the time you're 30 I won't even get a postcard. You're going to marry your boss and have two perfect children and when they ask about their grandmother you will have to think hard for five minutes before you can even remember my face. I will, of course, be sitting at home in a rocking chair, holding your photograph and bawling, calling out your name in a constant state of hysteria.""
| Sora.K chapter 5 . 4/13/2007
Great story, some errors but i loved it!Update soon!
| Miss-Simmone01 chapter 5 . 4/12/2007
I can't even tell you how excited I am for an update! YAY you, I totally understand that you have a life but i'm still excited cuz when i take a break from my life I read the stories on FP and i gotta tell u i'm runnin out of good stuff so to have you update even if is just a chapter totally rocks my socks
| LimeJuiceTub chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
Loved it! Your characters are very real and believable. Jenna's a sweetie - even if she did let herself get trampled over by Trevor. She really should have a little more feminine pride - standing up to Wesley, but not Trevor?
Lol - lucky Jon isn't here for the weekend - otherwise ...
I like how you ended the chapter - they're already like an old married couple - only they don't realise it. :D
The section about Farrah's candy was great! Jenna forcing him to eat it and then Wesley forcing Jenna to eat it! Totally rotflol! If that's the sort of thing they're going to do during this weekend with the family, I can't wait for the next chapter! :D Keep up the great work! :D
| rubygirl181 chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
Yay, you updated! I've been dying to know what happens. It was worth the wait, I loved it. I can't wait to read what happens next. I really enjoy employer/employee stories. PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE DON'T TAKE SO LONG TO UPDATE AGAIN. PLEASE!
| phelps112 chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
i like jenna,and i hope she stays friends with jessica. this whole wesley thing is funny though.
| mer-person chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
really hoping for an update here! please dont wait too long. this was such a great chapter
| WickedMe chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
I love this story and I was so excited to see your update. This is a very funny chapter, by the way. I hope to see more updates soon.
| Isobel Evans chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
aw! Cute. I love it.
I'm in love with Wesley and I would gladly have him if Jenna doesn't want him around. ;)
| Trmpetplaya1 chapter 5 . 4/10/2007
you updated! i'm so happy!
good chapter. i liked finding out about his family. they seem really cool (although it is rather large). and i like their developing relationship; very fun to read.
have fun out of town and fight that writer's block with all your might!