WOW!

I'm eating a McDonald's Double cheese burger, a small fries, and apple pie! v

Now I feel kinda weird About eating McDonalds... OH WELL!

Still creepy though...

Woot...

-O.o- Eh...heh... - Dude! When you get into the characters family history...it was like this odd moment...it's sort of like being at my house (but my dads still there...and yet everything is still screwed)! But I'm glad to have read and am hoping to see more...so...update at least one of these!

Morbid Maxwell~Will you become a fallen for me?

Lol-reading the openening made me think of how I hated the customers I had when I had my first job...but then the pickles caught my attention and I was trying to hold back a laugh...wow, I thought I was the only one who felt that way...great job here!

Morbid Maxwell~Will you become a fallen for me?

Lol- reading this made me think of my bro who is currently employed at a McDonalds not too far from our house! Lol-but just for the record...they get one free meal a day! But maybe it's just down here since more people eat at Taco Bell? Bleah, I personally hate both...but I love this!

Morbid Maxwell~Will you become a fallen for me?

Okay...I know I told you to update the other one...but this one is funny in a more realistic way...so...you've got me stuck in the middle and I want to beat you...but I love it!

Morbid Maxwell~Will you become a fallen for me?

NO! Even though i love this story! I love the other one too! But lol my bro's nearly the same way... only he didn't graduate on time. xx and he probably won't go to collage and will probably work at chili's for the rest of his life. -.-' oh well... But I love this story!

I don't know why... but I am so addicted to this friggin' story! it's like reading someone's diary, you can't stop even if nothing happens in their life! lol I say keep updating!

Aloha! Dragon here. I figured since you're my best reviewer, I should at least return the favor and check out some of your stuff. Anyway, I like the general feeling of this story. A nice casual one-shot. There were a few grammar problems in the Teddy/Kate paragraph, but otherwise, very well written. I'll try to check out your other story eventually.

BTW: I don't think that's a very long A/N. I mean, you have seen mine, right?

Ack! Don't have time to finish it all, but so far its god!. First two sentences were eye-catching. "Gum money."

Ah! I love this! It's very light and refreshing! and funny! Have you ever read Burger Wuss? I can't remember who it's by, other than his other book, Feed, is 1 of my favorite Dystopians ever (don't get me started on Dystopian literatre... I love it). Anyway, I'm rambling. It's about a kid who works at a fast food joint but hates his job. It's really damn funny. oh, and, BTW, I think you should just go and flat-out say that she works at McDonalds. Right at the very beginning. Cut away through the BS, just get it out there. My policiy on everything when it comes to writing (unless its some big plot secret or a memory someone's trying to repress, but I don't think Mcdonalds quite counts) rambling again! Keep writin'!

(While I wait for my activation to arrive... man, is it slow!)

Yours is the first story I've read on FictionPress and it's excellent. I'm sorry to say that I laughed the whole way through. Why am I sorry? Well, excuse me if I'm rather fond of my spleen! Well done Gayle of Genisis, it's excellent!-Summer Goose. (*snort* Look up the derivation for 'gossamer'.)