Reviews for Choices |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Um, can I vote here? Or is it on a poll in your profile? Ah, how about I do both. I say, option number one. But don't limit yourself, you can have them hating each other too. Your writing's great and you have a good flow - there were a few weird places, but I think if you look over at this you'll pick them up, since they mostly just seem to be typos (there aren't many either.) Tips for writing in the first person. Er, ramble a little, make inane references to weird things. This is a present day story, so a pop culture reference could work too, just not too many of them. Make Brooke a well rounded person and then I'll love her :D I think this is great so far, it's going onto my alerts. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I say Elaine! Haha, I know I'm too late, but I love to read stories about quiet people who stay quiet. I just find their character's so intriguing. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hey- i like the concept of this story, with the readers chosing what happens next! that's a pretty interesting idea! brooke is a great character so far. i hope you keep giving her depth, though, even when she's not talking about herself. you haven't really told us much about her personality- is she quirky? is she emo? is she slutty?- and i'd like to hear/read more about her. brittany's character seems like a jealous bitch, and she looks like she'll cause some problems down the road, because she's popular AND intelligent. for the voting thing, i like the second option, because that seems like the thing that would fit with what i do know about brooke. the first one seems kind of weird, and the third one doesn't really go with the whole man-hater thing. i know hat you haven't updated this in a while, but maybe this will make you want to update! i hope you keep on with this! ~eris |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG I love your writing style! It's kind of like Meg Cabot in the sense that it is fun to read, but not considering that most of what she writes you cannot show your mother and plus, it is pretty much superficial. So yeah. Did that make sense? If it didn't, know that it was a compliment. But anyway, I vote for the third cuz it is less predictable. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hey! I like this system, I think - it's a good way to get the readers involved! Personally, I'd go with the third option. The first two are used almost too frequently in stories... The third would be the most unique! Whichever one you choose, I wish you luck! I definitely plan to read this, so long as you plan to update it. I'd love to see where it goes! I have a main character named Brooke, too, so... It always intrigues me to read about a different one! I really like how you made it clear (in your profile) that you don't enjoy profanity or mention of drugs, etc. in people's writing. To me, that says that your writing is safe to read! Haha... I'm a literary neat freak. Anywho, keep the ideas coming! Please update this soon! - :-) p.s. Happy Thanksgiving! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I Vote that Brooke and the main male character hate each other, then slowly turn their hatred into love. Good story. Hope you update soon. Also, happy to hear you like my story. I'm very grateful for your reviews. Jade |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think Brooke should hate the main male character, cause its always fun to read how they fight at the beginning but then start to at civilised! :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() That short chapter was very intresting, I might say. My vote is: Brooke and the main male character hate each other, then slowly turned their hatred to love. I just started reading this story and might I say, it will turn out good. And I've never seen a writer let the readers/reviewers vote. -Smiles- Keep up the good work. Update when you can. Later. ~Lady Akina |
![]() ![]() ![]() oo this is exciting. i really liek the last idea, idk the other ones are great too but i think this one is like least commonly written about, so anyways continue writing and i will def continue reading/reviewing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think this chapter is okay. Brooke forgiving Brittany... I think that was a bit dumb. What I didn't like was the... I don't know, storytelling sort of aspect. Eh, and I think if you're looking from first person point of view, you're liable to go a bit crazy. Because this is a person's thoughts you're looking into... and I believe that if we look into ANYONE's thoughts, you'd immediately concur that they are absolutely barking mad. Have fun with it! If you have fun with it, we'll see that in your writing. I like how you showed Britanny's way of liking guys. You expanded on it and made it clear, and I think that's good. The way Brittany and Brooke started out their friendship was FUNNY, though. For the vote, the last one. I'd really love to see that plotline. And seeing a guy go absolutely CRAZY is fun. I used to be a man-hater... we man-haters never seem to last long, do we? What a shame. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hiya! Just want to give you my encouragement and say this is an excellent idea. Also, it'd be great if you could tell me which of the stories you're more likely to continue, because they all seem to have really intriguing plots... and it looks like you have potential as a writer. |
![]() ![]() ![]() can I give you a big hefty review later, because it's thundering here, and mom ish yelling at me to get off... *rolls eyes* Anyways, this looks like it's going to be really really good, so I think you should keep it up. I like the Brooke secretly find herself falling in love with the MMC, despite her previous oath of remaining a man hater OR ... option... but Love/hate was my story of the year last year... and still kinda is.. anyways, keep up the good work. |
![]() ![]() ![]() heyy! They all sound good. I think you picked one already tho. It sounds like it's going to be good! Well im putting an alert on you, so i can see what you come up with. Sounds like you are going to be aMaZiNg! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter! It seemed rushed in some spots, but overall great. I loved the line about men and the devil. lol And I really love this voting, it's so much fun! I think I'd choose Brooke liking the MMC as a friend while the MMC is falling madly in love with her. |
![]() ![]() The story is very good, I love how you put the main storyline of their friendship into one chapter. Although I would have started the story, story for the part where she and Brittany have a falling out. Just to make it seem less rushed but it's a GREAT story anyways. I am loving the plot so far. Well, ttyl ~Courtney |