this is a good story, im surprised no body else had reviewed. keep it up anyway!

If the Elders were willing to execute Sagen and Kaira for being Unusuals, why not the children? Why just banish them to Isolation? Perhaps the children are upset by being left so long without adults? Before Sagen and Kaira arrived, weren't they alone? Most children would find that scary. Other than that, I thought that was another amazing chapter. I liked Lavender's character, I hope you include her more often. Little Tiffana is darling, as always. I hope you develope Kaira's gift, as well as the childrens' gifts, in the near future. And update soon!

I loved the imagery in the line, "Sagen and I refused to take the fate they had served to us on a scroll of old parchment". I like how you explained why the letter wasn't sealed. It doesn't make much sense, but it's better than nothing. And your explanation of why their hair didn't get cut was perfect. What's Isolation? I hope you explain in the next chapter. Your cliffhangers at the end of chapters just make the reader want you to update soon!

Wow. How devious, and cruel. Why did he want them dead? Was it really because they were "poisoning the children's minds"? Or was it something else? I must read more and find out! One little nitpick, when you were saying how far they'd come in the first week, you said "275 miles." Make it an even number, like three hundred. It flows better. Also, you might want to use a unit of measurement better suited to the era of the piece, like leagues.

Why are they returning home? What's left for them there? They will be killed if they just show up. I do hope they get back before something happens to little Tiffana, though. She's a sweet girl. You did a good job of capturing her character.

I thought it was slightly abrupt that they would just decide to open the scroll, but I can see why they did so. The scroll's message itself was out of the Master's character. At the meeting he was formal and aloof, but in the scroll, he seems mocking and childish.

If I sound overly critical, don't worry! I still love the story, and I can't wait for another rapid update!

I love how Master addressed them: "It shall be made know to the kari and the koboku that..." Beautiful! It slams their unimportance into them with a sledge hammer. I also liked how you explained why they were sent, instead of a noble. I was wondering about that. It's a shame no one else has reviewed you, this is a beautiful story and I look forward to finding out what happens to them.

Fascinating. I'm adding you to Author Alert so that I can read more of this awesome story.

You might to repeat the names and their meanings several times, so the readers don't have to refer back to this chapter. Example: "X was a Kahi, a female servant, and she did many chores." Do that the first few times so the readers don't get confused.

I was a bit confused: are Kaira and Sagen seeing each other? Married? You might want to establish that a bit more in later chapters.

I started to skim over the first part, the bit in italics about Count Roland. I don't know how you could improve that section, but it was a bit boring.

Things I liked about this story: I liked how you established that to See was forbidden, and that Sagen has the Sight. I also liked how you portrayed the emotional connection between Kaira and Tiffana. Very nicely done.

I loved how you showed Kaira's unflinching obeidience to her masters. Even when he beats her, she still bows to him. Awesome literary technique.

Excellent vocabulary. I don't need to tell you how important it is to use variety in your words so that the reader doesn't skim. I loved the paragraph that starts with "KAHI KAIRA!" Your word choice is so varied and beautiful.

Kudos, kudos, kudos, and awesome job. Keep writing.