Reviews for Former Fatty |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I LOVE this story! It's so wonderful, and I hope you update soon! |
![]() ![]() oh wow, great update, even if it was revised, i really liked it, i hope you update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() oh dear. i'm soso glad you updated! yay. so like update more often now! i like how you revised the chapter. it's realy good. k so i gotta go. have agood day! |
![]() ![]() I liked much better this edited and revised chapter than the other one...Loved when Max stood by her side the whole time to suport her...Continue writing like this, ok?update soon |
![]() ![]() ![]() I liked this alot better than the last chapter 7. I can't wait for the next update! |
![]() ![]() Yeah, this chapter is better... thanks for not letting Andrea get raped! Anyway, I have a feeling that something is going to happen in the party... Hmm |
![]() ![]() MUCH better. I think this is the best way you could have gone. Nice job, very tactful. |
![]() ![]() ![]() nice story. i don't like phil |
![]() ![]() ![]() Update soon, yeah it's probably best this way and easier to write too...rape isn't the best subject to cover. Your much adoring fan X p.s When is Max going to admit he likes her? |
![]() ![]() I'll be honest. I hate the direction this story is going. Keep it light, it's teenage, and it doesn't suit darkness. Maybe some others characters... but not this one. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please do read again your first chapter! I mean this story is great, but this little mistakes are kinmd of annoying! In the first chapter it was said that Andys family was rich so they had maids. In this chapter she was left alone at home to cook her own soup. It just doesnt make sense! Other than that the chapter was good, the change was well done. I admired the way you described Andys reaction and the ones of the people around as well. I just kind of thought you could have explored more this development, nyway I dont know for sure what you have in mind, so it was just a thought. Keep on the good work! Please dont take too long to update! |
![]() ![]() ![]() awe, andy and max. If they do get together, wouldn't andy be kind of mad at Max because when she was fat he was friends but he never really liked her like that... i dunno, i'm probably not making any sense at all... update quickly! |
![]() ![]() *cheers* i'm so happy! but andrea SO should not be with phil. D max is really nice, though. _ i wonder... when is he gonna confess that he likes her? i know he does. XD good job on rewriting this, too! it's much better and lighthearted, except for ... 3 incidents? or rather 1 major incident, but she got over it really quickly... anyway, good luck with school and all that! hope you update soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() yay! i am happy you updated, and although i hate to admit it, this is a better version. it made it apparent that the main character was able to do something to make her life safer. i like it. write a cute chapter with phil though. i really like him a lot! PHIL IS SO HOT AND HE RULZ! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter! I definitely like this version better. I like that you kept the firts incident when he touched her because it adds something to your story and makes it not another teen romance story. I am looking forward to read the next chapter! |