really good! but please update faster! i hate not knowing what happens!

Man, shouldn't Violet at least give her mum a chance? That is so stupid, can't she clearly see that her mother does want to bond with her but is going about it the wrong way?

anyhow, it's been about 1 1/2 years since you last updated, I dunno if you're still thinking of continuing this on or it's been stopped for good, but I really do encourage you to move on with whatever inspirations hit. I know Writer's Block can be a bitch- I have it for one of my fics and I think I'm going to remove it. But that's because I just started it anyway, so it wont matter as much. But you, your fic- it's even been picked for SKOW awards a few times, this is definite proof that this fic is going somewhere! :D

So, I will be waiting for an update...though I'll probably SQUEE when that comes. _

Gulistanlik

Congrats! Your story has won Best Cliche (Judge's Pick)! Go check out your award at SKoW!

Congrats! You've won Best Cliche (Judge's Pick). Take a look at your award at SKoW!

I believe she has a strange mom...but I'll swap her for mine anytime. hehe. :D Hope you update soon!

Doc, ha. I know someone in real life nicknamed Doc too.

Seth and Violet's relationship is very unclear in the beginning. Without knowing that they're friends, it seems strange that he talks to her so freely about Matt and Daniel. Maybe move the explanation to an earlier part of the story?

I like the change in setting but the scene at Seth's house seems rushed and a bit random. Maybe connect the two scenes a little more?

The fallout with Daniel is a bit random. I mean, he's introduced as her best friend and then in the very next scene, he slights her. Have they not seen each other for a really long time? Maybe make the state of their relationship (before the start of school) a little clearer? She seems to accept his moron-ness very easily too, despite the fact that they've been friends for such a long time. Maybe elaborate on her reaction a little more? (Besides the fact that she's pissed off)

The focus on Matt's reactions in class seem a little extreme. While it makes sense that Violet would notice him especially, her constant mentions of him make it seem like she likes him already. Does this make sense?

I don't really like Violet as a narrator. I mean, she antagonizes Mr. Etkins merely because she can. It seems like her only motivation is that she's a pissed off teenager. Is this intentional? If not, maybe work on character development a little more?

"In fact, ‘family’ and ‘fun’ shouldn’t ever be used in the same sentence when it concerns this family." Ouch. I can see why this is titled 'Cynical' now. Maybe elaborate more on why Violet hates her family, besides the fact that they exist?

The half siblings explanation is confusing. I think the part that throws me off is "my mom just got knocked up a few times." So...her brothers and sisters aren't actually half siblings? Since Violet considers herself an only child, I thought her siblings were much older than her. During her commentary about how everyone hates family gatherings, she says that no one wants to go...yet earlier, she mentions the adults (her siblings, maybe?) all showing up voluntarily. Have I misunderstood this? Perhaps more explanation on Violet's background would help.

I think her mother introduces the idea of Matt too quickly. It seems forced. While it's a nice way to get Violet thinking about him, maybe introduce the idea a little later? Or after several meetings?

Typos: "You [definitely?] like the guy." and "Not in junior high, and [definitely?] not now."

It's hard to keep track of the relationships between all the family members when they're introduced. Maybe take a little time to introduce each of the important ones more?

A couple of missing commas between sentence clauses but otherwise, the language flows smoothly. It seems a bit strange that Matt and Violet recognize each other so easily after being apart for a long time. Maybe develop their meeting scene a little more? While I can imagine a woman like Violet's mother existing, Violet's portrayal of her is a bit hard to digest. Already, their relationship seems to be pigeonholed under the overbearing mother/rebellious teenage daughter category. Maybe elaborate on the mother/daughter relationship more to show that it is beyond this stereotype?

*off to next chapter!*

Haha I like Vie xD She's hilarious. And we get a new glimpse of her mother in this chapter... i hope you update soon! :)

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-Cherry

this was cute

Very good story so far. Violet's a great main character. Update soon!

Very... strange. For Vie to be so 'cynical' and now to break down... wow. It's like an inside look with why she is the way she is. Lol. I love it. Update!

LOVE The chapter. there are some things that you can up with that made me laugh so hard! Keep it up.