Reviews for On
Mbwun chapter 1 . 6/27/2005
Pretty good. Sometimes, it borders on cheesy with the whole "life is beautiful, all your dreams can come true" thing, but I like a lot of the imagery. Some of the lines are very cliche, but others, like "make Everest look up to you" I thought were quite original. I like the contrasts you put in between motion and the stops to remember.

He Who Walks On All Fours
Petal Pink chapter 1 . 6/26/2005
This is a really nice poem. I enjoyed the imagery and the general message of the poem. I especially liked how you set up almost opposites with your imagery. "freeze in time" but "fly on", "breath on" and "exhale" It had a nice rhythm to it. Great job!