I liked this a lot. The rhyming pattern flowed well, it didn't seem forced.

I like this one!

First line was wonderful to draw a reader in. :)

konichiwa

Oh wow, this poem was simply brilliant! It was complex and simple (if that's possible). It reminded me a bit of ee cummings. Have you ever read any of what he's written? Whatever - he's also got that confusing, once-you-understand-him-it's-simple sort of poems, too. Does that make any sense?

Anyway, the poem just flows so beautifully with itself, and I could sit here for hours (if I had the time) and not run out of things to say about it and emotions to feel when thinking about it. ) This is an outstanding poem, one that definitely deserves something ... I don't know what, but something worthwhile. Unfortunately, all I can give you is the fact that I'm going to add this to my favorites. It's not much, but you deserve that at least.

Zaijen

-Shan-

i understand this in a way. i mean it's hard to explain, but somewhere deep inside, i connected with it.

Dust settles on a whitened me be, I know my place.- It makes me think that your happy to just be who you are. You may be covered in dust or rust from being the same person so long and people might frown on that, but in the end you still know who you are. Very nice. (And thanks for the Christmas cheer, I‘m sorry to hear that your not feeling well. Keep those spirits up though, if Christmas is good for nothing else then its good for not having to go to school or work.) Peace.

Juliet.

Very strong Unca. Very strong indeed! I think this is one of my favourites oD xhXix

futile, even the rhymescheme sounds it. not quite sure about the ending. makes me think of the uselessness of trying to immortalize the written word. of course i haven't taken into considereation the aspect of anger. perhaps the person writes to express his anger at relationships.. or a relationship... but in the end it comes to nothing...

i love the ending but don't quite get it .

Like you said, inexplicable. All I can say is: very cool. Good poem that flows well, I really like it.

excellent rhyming, i commend you.

I don't understand it at all. It's very evocative, though. Is it random stream-of-poetic-consciousness, or is it focused on a -point-?

Absolutely brilliant! I love the idea - so inspirational. I love fire - the imagery is just superb and lovely! I really enjoyed this, keep at it Jack! ~David

Wow, that was cool! Good job!