|Reviews for brittle encounter|
| Dancinggal5389 chapter 1 . 8/23/2005
GREAT. omg i love your way with words
| Dyrielle chapter 1 . 8/22/2005
Awesome piece. ) I really like it. D
| LemonFlats chapter 1 . 8/13/2005
I like this very much.
You use some of the best imagery I've seen so far (i.e., "your eyes smack into mine").
I love the pauses you put in just the right places, and the break at the end before the last line- it's like the line fell with your heart.
"electric shock lightning bolt / jolt through me" I'm not quite sure what you wanted this to be, but my suggestion would be "electric-shock lightning bolt / jolts through me". "such a revolting, horryifying sound / the silence." Put a colon after "sound" (Nice imagery, by the way). "and its not meant to be here." **it's.
I like how you italicized the "not meant to be here" lines; like you're pleading, "it's not supposed to be this way! this isn't what was supposed to happen!"
I love how you show your emotion through this piece- great job. Keep writing!
| Sun Chime chapter 1 . 7/30/2005
Wow! I like it, especially the way yu've used suspensive pauses, it's all very dramatic! Really good thanks a bunch for the review.
| Justin-M-Bernard chapter 1 . 7/24/2005
I like this one too! Yay!I really like your word combinations and your word choices! Really great!
| the ultraviolent chapter 1 . 7/20/2005
wow. i love it. your words are just amazing. i read all your works, ill review them seperately, but i just wanted to say, your work is splendid.. such imagery, such fieryness.
| Lurking-Shadow chapter 1 . 7/19/2005
Another great piece. Your decriptions were perfect. I hate silences too. I've probably said this before, but ur really talented. i love ur work!
| fragglerock chapter 1 . 7/8/2005
AMAZING! I absolutely LOVE this piece, especially the line: "Your eyes smack into mine." It has such a beautiful, vivid tone!
| Aslan Israel chapter 1 . 7/7/2005
Short but very touching. Nice job.
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 6/30/2005
and its not meant to be here...it's
such sad last line.. beautiful poem
| my failure chapter 1 . 6/30/2005
Beautiful. i love "can't find the right words to thread onto my necklace sentence that's meant to capture you back into my heart." great job.:)
| Sorrowful Dreams chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
deep and touching. love the last lines to it. Very emotional.
| liz anya chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
Rich imagery and well expressed thoughts. I like this one a lot.
| B. M. Reed chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
very sad, very lonely..i like this a lot.
| TwystedFate chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
Beautiful. Lovely job.