|Reviews for Continuity|
| a silenced revolution chapter 1 . 3/2/2010
I like the frenzied-sounding philosophy in this,
like a perspective on the nature of life in general,
sort of grim but a question of the meaning of it all.
Or at least that's what I got.
"(Will we always scratch at
the lid and never dream?"
Like we're all trapped inside something but too afraid
to dream ourselves out of it.
| Phoenix Octavia Bright chapter 1 . 5/8/2009
I also like it the way it is.
"Losing continuity, letting you flood into me"
I like that part, and also
"A decaying...halitosis kiss"
Like the use of words
| breezy nostrils chapter 1 . 2/15/2006
suggestions...m sorry not good with that kind of advice. it seems to work well the way it is. beautiful imagery tho!
| UnfortunateSoul chapter 1 . 11/21/2005
By the way, thanks for reviewing me again- I enjoy your advice.
I was searching for something of yours, specifically that had few reviews- and I found one!
I love the title- very fitting. "A halitosis Kiss"
| David Stephen chapter 1 . 7/2/2005
I totally love this one Jack! I love the "A decaying sliding mass ofsugared rotting ‘bliss..’- a tasteless teething error," - absolutely fabulous! Fav's! DS
| Calligrapher of Hearts chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
Note: written in the very early hours… may need some of the format changing. If you have any suggestions let me know.
Seems all right to me.
| Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 6/29/2005
Well, I love it the way it is! Keep writing!