Reviews for Swoon
Syren of the Sky chapter 1 . 7/17/2005
beautious colorful words that swirl like the maelstrom you describe; they catch me up and hopd me in a frzen r"rapturous plungle" through done.
Lowell Boston chapter 1 . 7/7/2005
Not sure if this has a formating proplem, but I noticed and read the middle stanza first thinking that was the poem. I think that alone works by itself because it doesn't use the rhythming structure that you start off with in the beginning. Also I think the ending is much stronger than the last two words/lines that you end with. Anyway, take the above only as a suggestion.

Lowell
Cheesy Brussle Sprouts chapter 1 . 6/30/2005
this is a good poem. could be happy could be sad