Reviews for Thunderstorm
pointythings chapter 1 . 7/17/2005
Personally, I think you're better off with free verse poetry. Some of the rhyming seems a little forced, and the format of repeating the second line of each stanza gets annoying, and doesn't always work. I think if you went free verse, this could be a good poem.

Yours in writing,~pointythings~
Amara the Warrior chapter 1 . 7/16/2005
Ohh...I like this. "As the sun slides behind the clouds". Very descriptive.