YOUR DESCRIPTIONS ARE SO GREAT. they're vivid and paint such a clear picture. great job. i like all your similes. maybe if the last line were formatted differently, it'd give it a more finished effect. that's just me, of course. oh, and i have two other things to say to you . . . JUST BECAUSE YOU GET A REVIEW WITH SOME CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM DOESN'T MEAN YOU SHOULD TAKE THE WORK OFF. put the beach poem back on! and if you write reviews, you'll get reviews. it's a great way to get readers. keep writing, germie!

I am one of those poeple who yearns for suicide. I hate my life. I have thought about it a lot lately, and I am indecision. (yes, I know. My spelling sooksh!) Good poem. Please R&R my poetry! SAYONARA! ~pyrofiregirl101