Reviews for Child of Darkness Book One
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 21 . 10/31/2016
Ha! That's so cool! But horrible at the same time... it's good she got out when she did. If this is her escape (and really, I shouldn't just assume that), it was a lot less violent than I expected. But even if it is, it isn't necessarily over yet...
It's interesting how free she is even when she's not. I mean, one might assume that a slave in her position is helpless, but she has more people sort of looking out for her than one might initially realize. Plus, he may control her body, but he can't control her whole mind. I'm reading another book that's enforcing the same type of message - one is not always helpless to their master's will. I could go on about this for a long time... but I won't. ;) Love it! Can't wait for more! :D
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 20 . 10/31/2016
I was worried for a moment there. I'm glad they're all safe though.
I'm curious, following last chapter, how she manages to get her voice back. I'm guessing it was part of how she got away, since if it was missing from around his neck he would just take it again...
Can't wait for more! :)
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 19 . 10/31/2016
Sorry for the delay! That ... was horribly depressing. That and the previous chapter. I'd be a lot more depressed if I didn't already know she'd have her voice back.
Well... on to the next one! Keep it up! :D
Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 4 . 7/8/2013
Amazing story so far! This is such an interesting plotline! I can't wait to read more! I saw a few spelling mistakes (well kind of), but it really wasn't anything too serious.
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
Tarah xXx
Hi28 chapter 2 . 2/7/2013
Really good chapter- a few mistakes but that's it
NoShortageofFault chapter 2 . 2/7/2013
When I finished reading the prologue, I literally went "Dun, Dun, DUNNNNNNN." It felt necessary.

Anyways, amazing story so far! Very addicting and professionally written. I'm definitely following this, keep up the good work!
:)
K chapter 3 . 10/28/2012
I really like the concept/plot of the story, it is creative and although it is considered a "paranormal romance" it is well executed.
However, your writing lacks emotional depth. When Adianna had the flashback about being attacked by the guy while she was reading, I felt absolutely noohing for her, because it was out of the blue and very, very bland. I would also recommend to use punctuation, because there is a noticeable lack of commas. Another thing is to stop using phrases like "she said cryptically" or "he said humourlessly" because it sounds like you are expecting the reader to think it's cryptic, when really it sounds contrived and overly-done. The tenses switch alot, and I sometimes had trouble distinguishing which character you were talking about.
Except for those tiny errors, the story is great, and I find Adianna to be an engaging character.
Regards,
K.
DeenaSoraDrake chapter 34 . 2/4/2010
I absolutely loved this story. I found myself drawn back to it whenever I had to put it down for the night. It seems very professionally written. However, I noticed numerous typos in every chapter. I tripped over them, but I could still tell what you most likely meant. Fix these, and that should make it a little better, though after that, I can't think of anything else that could be done to improve the story. ;) I'm looking forward to reading the sequel.
WORLDxDOMINATION chapter 12 . 6/26/2009
Wow, I really like your story so far. It's really good!
A.V.Mackie chapter 34 . 8/17/2007
Okay, now that I've finished I have to say i really enjoyed your story. It's not perfect and in some places its bloody annoying or makes no sense to me. I mean sometimes it seemed as if you hadn't decided what sort of period you wanted to set the story in, i.e. the horses when they could have used cars and the that force-field thing. But the style, jumping back and forth from the past to the present, that I really liked, it worked really well with the story. Also I'm pretty sure you either read too much manga or watch too much anime, 'cause you were always using Japanese words when they made no sense being there, not that I don't like anime, love it really. Have to admit I did like the nekojin thing, that was new to me in a vampire story. In the end though I will say this, good stuff, could be improved but damn good anyway.
A.V.Mackie chapter 21 . 8/17/2007
A force-field! WTF?
A.V.Mackie chapter 15 . 8/17/2007
Dear god! Why is he riding a goddamned horse for chrissake?
A.V.Mackie chapter 14 . 8/17/2007
Reading through this story, I'm enjoying it, but the random Japanese is a bit corny. If it doesn't have a good reason I'm not gonna enjoy the rest of the story.
Icepanda chapter 1 . 2/22/2007
it's a really nice story, thank you for writing it. i enjoyed reading the whole story and i finished it all in one day :D
Rachel chapter 1 . 9/22/2006
Hey! Just reading the prologue, and so far it seems suspensful! The whole "love" comments from one of your characters seems to summon Captain Jack Sparrow to mind. lol. Well have a great weekend, and I'll see ya in Latin on Mon!
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