Have you ever heard of the story 'Vampire Lover'? Well, in case you haven't, your story seems awfully like that.

She goes into a 'haunted' house with a guy, they spot a coffin, he opens it, vampire kills him. She cries. He takes her as a slave. He becomes nasty to her. Uses her for sex. Then she meets a guy from outside, he comes in, he leaves. Then vampire asks her if anyone has been in the house, she says no. Then vampire sees the guy, kills him. She cries and starts saying how he takes away all the people she cares for. He locks her up. Then she manages to escape his barriers, she gets badly injured. He found her and nurse her back to health, and becomes really nice to her because he loves her.

See my point? It's EXACTLY the same. And apparently, she created the story before you. I understand if you didn't know but if you did, well, I hate unoriginal people, copying someone elses story and say it's their own. (If you haven't) Check out her story. Spot the similarity.

UPDATE

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awesome story please update soon

woo hoo... Yay! I love the update.. This chapter was so cute. I can't believe you ended the way you did. The next update better be soon or you may have to lock me away from going insane..lol! I can't wait

O... What? Suddenly What? They fall in the lake? The Police finaly get suspisious? Matthew starts tickeling Katherine? What?

Mmore? Please?

Well you might want to write about how Matthew isn't sure if he should or shouldn't make Katherine a vampire. Or maybe Katherine wants to see what had been happening to her family and friends and how Matthew doesn't want her to for fear that she'll be unhappy knowing that_ happened to her family. Or maybe you could write about how Matthew became a vampire and about his childhood which should be a bit dark if he expresses his love for Katterine by hitting, and raping her. I hope these suggestions are of use for you.

wow first this is really intresting twist- but how can she be nice to him! after what he did to her for all that time - because he loved her! No one who loved them that much could do that to them- kill maybe- torture no- this isnt an attack on you or anyone im just expressing my opinion sorry :)still its really good

oh i really like, keep it comin

Oh goody I had no idea you'd updated this but it's great! Although there's some miner spelling mistakes but it happends no big deal, please update this rocks too!

Aside from some missing speach marks this was fine and your writing style is much improving. I hope h finds those men though. Surely he cannot let them get way with hurting her like that? While this was sweet and everything it seems a little hard to believe she would forgive Matthew so easily after all he put her through. I undersatnd her needing his help and everything but to fall asleep dreaming of him- it just feels to rushed and after everything he did I think it is going to be very hard to ever manage to wipe the blackboard, or slate clen. Maybe if you put in more of your thoughts explaining her change of feelings and thought process I could understand it better. But you are probably planning to do that next chapter. Anyway, this was sweet and aside from the evil men a little lighter than your previous chapters. Luv Kaitx

arg.. how can u say that.. waiting that long is pure crazy... i loved this chapter.. u keep improving. keep it up

Okay, QUESTIONS:When does Mattew feed?Why has Katherine suddenly become comfortable with Matthew? I mean after all that abuse you'd think she'd still be a little upset. Even if he saved her 't Matthew have more of a harder personality even if he loves her?Will there be possible flashbcks?

Well, I'm done nagging(I don't mean to sound rude, just ienterested). As always I love the plot and your writing is awsome.

Your Faithful Reader, LadtyJustice

That was great! I can't wait for your next update!

This was not one of your better chapters. All the grammar, spelling, and such and such was fine but how this chapter was written could have better. Awaiting more.

Majigney-Foofoo

This is really good. Hurry and update!