This has a wonderful rhythm to it, you paced it very well. The repetition is good too, you really made it work to your advantage. There are a lot of positive things here for a subject seemingly so negative, I liked it.

Love is certainly a good fuel for poetry. I must ask when is your next chapter coming for creatures that kissed in cold mirrors? Anyways, good poem and keep writing.

Very Nice.. Can relate..

-nods- i know exactly how you feel. i am going through the same thing right now, although it's different because i'm a girl ... deeply in love with one of her best friends, who is also a girl ... anyway, this was great. powerful and very nicely written. the lines were simplistic but beautiful. excellent, please keep writing.

I read that reivew that you didn't think was a positive one, and actually I think she was trying to say that she understood how you felt. But anyway, I really like this poem and I'm happy that you decided to post it. I can totally understand where you're coming from and I think this poem beautifully demonstrates how you've been feeling. Isn't poetry fun? And thanks for the review and the mention of Charades. I'm writing yet another Bam fic. There should be info up on it tommorow.

I can relate...nice job!

I loved your poem...very good...i bet you love this person very much...anyways...Keep Writing...RingWraith

dont feel like your the only one that feels that way about someone who isnt worht it.