wow . . .I LOVE YOUR WRITING. i liked how short yet to the point this piece was. you describe things wonderfully: you don't indulge and go over-the-top, but write with just enough flourish that both interests and excites (I'M NOT EXAGGERATING).one suggestion: work your brain to think of original and more creative titles ;)will review the rest of your writing when i can.

awe man. that hurts. losing someone is a hard thing to go through. i'm sorry if you lost anyone. i love the second line. amazing job.

I think everyone can relate to this, or otherwise will no doubt be able to someday. Well done. caliorbust