This poem is a little too modern for my taste. I like the classic meter or rhyme scheme. This could have been written as a different type of prose and achieve an even greater effect. Although I do not like this form *for a poem* these types of poems are very common. Although this poem might sound choppy and quite incomplete when read, the phrasing, use of words, and descriptions reveal a higher level of literacy. Good job. I will rate this poem 8/10 *because I'm not much of a poet, short stories and novels are my forte*.

that's so sad T_T...beautiful in it's own way...

are there homo-erotic suggestions in this piece?or is it just me..haha..nice, but a bit morbid! keep writing D

Horribly true on the views of such things in society.. Portrayed with such emotion.. Very nice.. Ja..

Bravo! A beautiful and cruel poem, with a hoped for awakening. Wonderful choice in words that aches with all.

This is horrifying. And it's beautiful. Good job.