Again, I found this helpful. I'm still having a tough time putting labels on my characters for flaws and weaknesses and stuff, but this gave me motivation to actually go and do it.

A few things that bugged me are once, you said that readers DO want to hear the writer bashing heroes, when I think you meant DO NOT. But I'm not so sure... Also, once you were talking about Jack Stones, and you said to talk about their sexy chin when their concentrating... what?

I also think you could have gone into a bit more detail, but it got the point across, which is good enough for me.

Yeah, I see what you mean. It's not just the character, but the character definitely has a lot to do with it. I used to be so afraid of writing a Mary Sue that I went out of my way to go against everything I had heard was 'Mary Sue.' Needless to say, it didn't work too well.

I thought this chapter didn't have as many issues with run-on sentences. One thing that bugs me, though, is that at the very end you say "three traits" but then only list 'a' and 'b.' You never give us a third.

You did a pretty good job of summing up Mary Sues, but by no means explained all of it, so I'm going to go read the next chapter now.

Hey. I've been having a lot of problems writing characters, so this was really helpful. I'm about to write a story where I have about a bazillion characters and really need to learn how to describe them. Thanks for sharing this.

I did notice that some of your sentences were sort of run-on, making them hard to concentrate on. Overall, though, what I learned from this far outweighed what bothered me (you might want to take a look at those run-on sentences). No time for a long review, I want to read the next to chapters.

Wow! This was pretty informative. Pretty good. I'll try to take some of your advice.

HI!. I've tried looking for a test for Touched by an angel but I couldn't any so I went to the oringal one and accordly to my score it isn't a mary sue but I'm still not too sure.

anyway good work on this essay.

please update soon

see ya

HI!. um very interesting essay I have been confused and wanted to find out what a mary sue is as there are different views and another reason is because I want to find out if I've written one (you know hwne I've been messing with ideas and no I'm a member of this site or anyu other)

anyway good work keep it up

please update soon

see ya