Reviews for Pretty Bags and Poor Girls
anonymaifif3994 chapter 1 . 7/13/2005
That double i mistake was html that didn't go through. Thanks for pointing it out.

And the "less than twenty years older" was a reference to the mother being very young. Maybe I should try clarifying that more?
Quelleruth chapter 1 . 7/13/2005
Good poem. somehow, I find it incredibly, overwhelmingly sad...

"I am trying rip open the inconsolable secret in each one of you- the secret which hurts so much that you take your revenge on it by calling it names like Nostalgia and Romanticism and Adolescence..." -C. S. Lewis, "Transposition and other Addresses," ch. 2 / The Weight of Glory
sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 7/13/2005
This was a well-executed attack on superficiality and consumerism… if that’s even a word. I loved the part that said, “i could be yours with some patience;/ a few small payments over the course/ of merely thirty six weeks.” I enjoyed the dry, sarcastic humor this poem was laced with. I could keep praising this piece, but I’ve actually got something helpful to say! I think you’ve got one extra “i” in line thirteen. I could just not understand something, but it looks like a typo to me. And in the fourth line from the end, I think you meant “twenty years old” instead of “twenty years older.” Other than that, this poem is perfect. Keep up the good work!
Nobody-n-Particular chapter 1 . 7/13/2005
Great diction and style.