|Reviews for God|
| InspirASIAN chapter 1 . 7/27/2005
so sincere, i luv it
Your sis in Christ,
| For the Kingdom chapter 1 . 7/19/2005
Freaky...I was just thinking that today...freaky.
Great job with descriptive words. Keep it up.
| The Postscript chapter 1 . 7/17/2005
To be honest: the vocab really is repetitive and message simple. Not that it is a bad message, just simple and plain. Nothing creative. Lines like "You're my sun and moon/You're the evening and morning star to me" don't flow. I think the line that showed the most potential was "Your bright smile and sparkling words are like jewels to me" because of the images and description. Good poetry paints a picture and includes deeper emotion than this. Transform plain lines like "When I feel Your presence, my hear soars" into images and this will be a better write. Keep writing for Him. God Bless.
| Mychael Lynne chapter 1 . 7/16/2005
that was great! i really liked it!
| arwen-evenstar89 chapter 1 . 7/15/2005
I LOVE IT! it's so true... i've thought of most of this stuff a million times but i've never been able to get it out. you made me want to actually start writing again too...anyways... awesome job!
| His Mercy's Waiting chapter 1 . 7/15/2005
i liked it alot; very honest and descriptive. keep writing!
| Rainy Novembers chapter 1 . 7/15/2005
Good descriptive language. Nice poem, but I thought you used "you" a little too much. It would have been cool if every line started with you, but I felt too many did. Other than that it's a really good poem. Good job!