Reviews for I Walked Beside You
Eirien chapter 1 . 7/17/2005
This is absolutely beautiful in its imagery and rhyming. The different times of the day as well as the image of the road are applied nicely to the different stages in a relationship, and this truthfully portrays the phases most relationships go through, from initial overflowing love and happiness at having found each other, to difficult times with struggles and arguments and having to come to terms with each other's different character traits and peculiarities, to - hopefully, and if God gives the strength - a deeper level of love where every disagreement and conflict is integrated into the whole and the sense of belonging together is stronger than all the difficulties. You have expressed this beautifully. This poem is going on my favourites list. ;-)
Kella Trams chapter 1 . 7/16/2005
Nice job on a simple rhyming poem. Your rhyming is nice and subtle and and so is the rhythm so that it doesn't feel like a children's rhyme or something. I would suggest separating the three parts of the poem with breaks. Just a thought.