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Your writing is brilliant. It is original, well-thought, well-written, well-everything. People who can't appreciate this have no real appreciation for art. I realize this sounds pretencious but-

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LIEBESTRAUM! you are my kindred spirit *pats self on nose, forcing self to calm down*

I think I now understand the metephoracal worth of this story. lilia is ...a muse, really, kind of the spirit of music. I love this story, it's so so sad. my only crtiticism for this bit would be it's so much longer than the rest of the chapters, perhaps you should have spaced it out instead of posting all at once.

That's such a sad, bitter ending...you aren't going to leave it there are you? *weeps & adds to author alert* keep it up dearest!

so...is maya some kind of second life of lilia? I think I've got it...beautiful language, the new characters are very interesting. and yay for debussy! (the girl with the flaxen hair...*sigh*)

still very pretty, but I don't understand the connections yet. maybe I'll snoop around the smarter peoples' reviews. I love how you embody the music so well in your lyrical style.

“Tomorrow never comes,” she said lamely...I think you were describing her tone with the word 'lame' but the quote is so great I wouldn't use that word. reminds me of les mis, 'they dreamed of tommorow but tommorow never came.'

OMG! someone besides myself who has heard 'cavalleria rusticana'! and i adore that intermezzo! deedeedudu...*hums*

wow what a beautiful beginning. your word choice was justso pretty. loffly prose style. anyway, you said in your profile you like cc so...

'The apple trees bore fruit all-year-round' you don't need the dashes.

'when I saw her raven-haired shade gliding through the forest' technecally 'shade' means 'shadow' and shadows are coloreless...

The switching of POV throughout was okay till the end when it got kind of confusing. I would haveliked more descriptives of the strange person who appeared so suddenly.

onward for more!

A very interesting setup here. I'm a little confused though. Are you just basically writing what the music makes you think? (I do that a lot)...will it be a structured story or kind of musings? I suppose the more I read the more I will understand...I'm intruiged, so I continue. forgive me if I'm a little slow. :P

Hey. I don't have time to review anything anew, I'm afraid, but I wanted to say thanks for your review of my story. I am English, btw, and writing in the UK, so some of your suggestions reflect that. Just thought I'd let you know before you corrected any more Uk spellings. I'll try to read more of 'Fire' within the next few days.

plz update soon, must find out what happens! hope to hear from you soon, have a nice week!-anime freakizoid X_X

simply amazing, i hope this gets published someday i bet it would be a hit! must keep going, I'm hooked!-anime freakizoid

you get better and better each time you revise this, i still LOVE this story! sorry it took me so long to review, just barely back from vacation. but i hope your summer has been lots of fun!-anime freakizoid

Okay, let me get this straight...

Ruben is in Avalon, timeless place connected to and essential to the order of the universe. Lilia comes there and her playing tunes the stars, bringing/maintaining order. Then she disappears from Avalon and Ruben, who has fallen in love with her, is determined to get her back. But you have to die to come to Avalon. He finds Lilia's soul in Maya, who is suicidal, but he doesn't let her die because he wants no blood on his hands. So, with his music, he meets her in some other plane/world/place and they talk - her confused and eventually angry. Meanwhile, Daniel wants to have his sister June tune the world to his/their liking, and to do this he kills Ruben so that Lilia can't be brought back.

Phew! If I've got any of that wrong, *please* tell me. This is a confusing story but it's really good. And yet again I really can't find anything wrong with it. If I've got something wrong in my plot-summary-thing, then you would need to do some tweaking to make it a little more clear.

I hope you update soon.

I think I'm going to be hooked to this but for now I have to go do something else. This is such an original story. The only thing it reminds me of is Alex Garland's novel 'The Coma' (he's the guy who wrote 'The Beach'), which has a disjointed flow and is slightly confusing. But this is very different to that. And very good. I *really* can't think of anything to criticise, you've really done a good job of polishing this to perfection. Seriously, if I find something wrong, I'll let you know.

Okay, I had to read this because it has such an interesting title, summary and then introduction. And man, this is pretty awesome. It is *so* original, and I love that. So much these days is rehashed, boring... and this is different.

I know, you don't like people blindly singing your praises. But I can't think of anything wrong with it yet. I'll read more and let you know if anything seems wrong.

once again-awesome. dazzling details, and I knew the song again! Please update soon.