Reviews for he was velvet |
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![]() ![]() ![]() That poem's reads quick, smooth and has heartfelt creativity in it. I like how it's your originality with flair of this boy. he was beyond the pricetagsof anything i broughthe was fairy taleswith nightmare endingsLike all of that. Great |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful and well-written, a delicious flurry of phrases and imagery. |
![]() ![]() ![]() wow, i love the emotions in this, simply profound~~ excellent job~ keep writing! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great job on this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() this is really good. Very sad and touching but well described. great work ~Sorrow~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Awesome! I REALLY like this one! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very cool use of metaphor. I like how you used parallell structure and metaphor to create this wonderful pattern of thought, because all the images weren't divided into good things and then the second half was bad things. It almost seemed like true thought process in action. Very cool. Wonderful poem! |
![]() ![]() ![]() beautiful imagery, really gorgeous. -hecate. |
![]() ![]() ![]() awesome metaphors... amazing poem |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very touchingly sweet & longing. Seemed like the rhyme slipped quite a bit halfway through, though. Might have just been me. Ah well. Love the title, too. -salt. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Beautiful descriptions. Perfect. Brava. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Truly INCREDIBLE! This one's going on my favorites list! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this was good.I can relate to the following:"he was broken heartsupon my wall he waseverything to me yetnever anything at all." "he was beyond the pricetagsof anything i brought" |
![]() ![]() ![]() omg, i absolute loved this poem! I loved all the metaphors, the short, but sharp lines, how you tied all his different sides together, and how the ending was so bittersweet that it almost made me cry. ur a superb writer! |
![]() ![]() ![]() i like the flow. regretish tone i get from it. nice images |