I dont like how you end it!.

Type your review here. Hi. I was almost giving up on a good captivating story on fan fiction when I came across been searching for hours on a writing style like the writer" Lovinghannibal", where I as a reader cannot guess what is going to happen story really captivates me, nothing but excellence.

Man this chick is really grinding on my nerves-her self loathing and spinelessness. Jesus christ.

Besides that, I really like your writing style.

Though I'm not one to shower praises so early on, I had to say that your writing style is really well suited to the story. I love how its a passive, unemotive voice that really shows that the girls identity has been robbed.

Amazing! Really well done.

Interesting story:)

This is beautiful and compels one to read more

This story was a-okay :)

I just love the beginning of your story.
I want you to know that i'm french and the dessert that you talked about is a "Moelleux".
I don't think you want to say "C'est très belle" because it means "It's very beautiful" maybe you means "it's delicious" ("C'est délicieux") or "it's wonderful" ("C'est merveilleux") or "it's very good" ("C'est très bon"). Well, it's up to you. I just want to help you if one day you will publish your story.

Great ending. I like how it wasn't a perfect sappy ending and it kept his constant uncertainty eminent through that gesture. I understand her confusion yet I feel how she feels so connected with him. The only issue I had with the story is I get confused when it's a flashback or the scene changes. There aren't any specific time markers that it doesn't make any sense as to when the scenes happening of who's talking.

I absolutely loved this story! Great Work!:D

Is there somebody that knows some good stories like this one(as in not a chliché-high school setting-hate/love-crap) :) btw loved this story xoxo

Gah! I wish I knew if he was alive or not, although I'm sure he is because who else would send Oleander?

Good story!

Wow, interesting ending.

I knew she was going to get pregnant! I just knew it!

Hmm, she hadn't seen him in a few days. Maybe he was with the other woman? Wasn't the charity ball supposed to be the night after she got drunk and destructive?

I also like his small flutter of jealousy. Although he shouldn't since I dont think he is the faithful type or even be faithful.