I really really like this. It's kind of like a poem/story/drabble. I can relate to almost every line, which has me falling in love with this and sympathizing for the narrator. The divided sections idea is brilliant. Awesome!

PS. Thanks for adding one of my pieces to your favs. :)

Lovely :3

I don't particularly enjoy your writing style but...shit! I'm in floods of tears!

IN MY SCHOOL LIBRARY! XD

Wow. Wow. Wow.

wow. one of you're great fics! love this!:D

Wow! This was amazing. I loved it. I was close to tearing up because of how real the emotions were. Beautifully written.

I cried. Honest to god, I cried my eyes out (don't worry, I loved).

Beautiful :)

Getting your heart broken hurts so much, especially first love... Yet you never want to taint it with hatred and bitterness, those memories are too precious.

This story touched me like almost no other on fictionpress, it took my breath away and made me sad, but it was breathtakingly beautiful, I know how she felt, which was why it got to me even more, but still, when I first read this, it helped me a lot.

-ani

how beautiful!

The structure is a little uncomfortable; paragraphs are easier for me to read, and I would recommend getting a beta to comb through for grammatical/spelling errors or editing again yourself because those things do detract from the reading. But you've chosen some wonderful scenes, and the life lessons peppered in bowled me over each time. So many beautiful, beautiful insights into love, growth, and change. What amazing emotion comes through such simple language! A few of my favorites:

"She's beautiful... The girl you love."

"How was it that you didn't love me, but that I still felt so loved by you?"

"All he does is just work on the case, but doesn’t work on the people."

"He had kept so many things inside of him and never had anyone to tell it to. Now he does."

Thank you for such an inspirational, heartwarming story.

i loved every bit of this story...very nicely written! :)

Oh my god. That was amazing. I think that addressing her first love as "you" really made it more personal and moving.

WOW. That was really extremely amazingly cute.

I loved every bit of it and re-read it a lot.

:]

I would write a lon review complimenting you on this gorgeous piece of writing, but I feel like that would destroy the magic.

So I'll simply say

This was simply beautiful, so breathetakingly magical and I loved it so much, it really touched my heart.

That was so... beautiful and true! I think it's brilliant and the best thing I've read onfictionpress so far. Thank you!

This was quite interesting, and I liked it. There were a few grammar errors here and there, but nothing bad enough to detract from the story. (: Creative plot, developed characters. I also like the POV (2nd). (: This was an amazing oneshot, and I'm glad xoxluurve added it to our c2. (: