This is so... Sad, I like the second to last paragraph, very effective... You know i'm crap at reviews... So... Awesome, as always. You have talent I want... :(

I love it. It's very good and it just pulled me in to the their world. It could use some more descriptions perhaps thematic and explain why she killed her self. Read my story "The Beach At the Chateuax(Revised Edition)" It's alot like this

wonderful! very powerful emotions in this work.