|Reviews for inside my mind|
| in theory chapter 2 . 11/20/2005
Pretty, and your pen name interested me too. Nice work :)
| David Stephen chapter 8 . 10/21/2005
Wow - these poems are so heartfelt and I can tell they have come from the heart. You write with a lovely flare - continue! Thank you for my review for TRRT- it is very much appreciated! :) ~DS~
| teendramaqueen2005 chapter 8 . 8/26/2005
hey, these are really good! Keep up the great work
| Katterree Fengari chapter 7 . 8/11/2005
hmm...again the tone feels, I don't know, skewed. A little too much repitition on the "5 years" I think. But good rhythm. However, I have no idea what happened to the speaker.
| Katterree Fengari chapter 6 . 8/11/2005
um...oddly enough, it feels like you're telling the story from an outside perspective. Like, if you had it in third person instead of first, it would make sense.
I mean, the bitter "life made me this way" fits, but saying that "I have an...attititude" and "hoping/ that one day/ I will live" just feels like a conflicting tone to me. Psychologically, it doesn't make sense, I don't know...maybe if it were after-the-fact.
There's also some typos on the line "lite up m life" 'lit' and 'my' instead, I think.
I do like the repitition of "wishing/ hoping" that works well.
| Lady Lucia chapter 3 . 8/7/2005
"is it right to wake up everyday and dread the sun?"
I love that line.
| Lady Lucia chapter 2 . 8/7/2005
OH! very nice and descriptive. i liked it alot!
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 8 . 8/7/2005
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 7 . 8/7/2005
5 years is a long time. Maybe something really great will change your life in the future and you'll go back to being happy and carefree.
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 6 . 8/7/2005
Yep, I go through that every single day.
It's definitely a trip.
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 5 . 8/7/2005
I guess you just have to make yourself open up to people. I have to. It's really hard, but sometimes, it can make life a lot easier.
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 4 . 8/7/2005
Hmm... Yeah... Life's a bitch.
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 3 . 8/7/2005
That. Is. Exactly. How. I. Feel.
| DragonFaeLynn chapter 2 . 8/7/2005
Cute. I like it.
| Lady Lucia chapter 1 . 8/2/2005
P.S. "the prophecy" sounds cool!